The Creation
A Book by Emily Dickinson Jr.
 A sniper visits a preschool one day to entertain and educate the children on both the danger/fun of firearms.
© 2012 Emily Dickinson Jr. All rights reserved  © 2012 Emily Dickinson Jr.
Author's Note
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My first book ever so please be gentle
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Wow!! This is amazing so far. I can relate to Hollie's fascination with guns, I love your characters. Especially Hollie's mother. I cant wait for more! Send me Read Requests if you can!
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Sure :-) I haven't been updating as often but when I do I'll tell you
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11 Years Ago
Yay! Thank you!
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11 Years Ago
Send me some read request for updates too. I posted one of your stories to twitter, it got read and .. read moreSend me some read request for updates too. I posted one of your stories to twitter, it got read and reposted. Good work!
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11 Years Ago
aww thanx so much Sherman! I'm so glad to hear it and dont worry whenever I post something new I al.. read moreaww thanx so much Sherman! I'm so glad to hear it and dont worry whenever I post something new I always rr my friend list. :-)
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11 Years Ago
You are very welcome
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This is very creative and quite original. Sure it has a few factual problems, but isn’t that what writing fiction is all about? It might be better to add a reason for Hollies’ mother being alone and agreeing to let her daughter go at this point in the story. You are on the road to being Emily Dickinson Jr.
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
thanx so much!!! I actually lacked the detail with the mother to add to her mystique kind of add a .. read morethanx so much!!! I actually lacked the detail with the mother to add to her mystique kind of add a msytery layer to the action ya know? You know at first someone told me that this was cliche? I couldn't belive them lol I'v personally never read something similar. anyways im rly glad you liked it.
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12 Years Ago
It is actually very original and you should think of re-writing it into a full novel.
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12 Years Ago
how do you do that?? this actually my first time writing anything more than a one-off short story
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12 Years Ago
Start with what you have, and you have a wonderful outline, then build charactors. You can leave the.. read moreStart with what you have, and you have a wonderful outline, then build charactors. You can leave the mother as a unanswered charactor, leaving the reader wondering what her story is. Building the other charactors will give you past lifes to explain present lifes. Then just build on what you have by re-writing it from start to finish over and over until it all falls together as a completed novel. You for sure have the talent and only need to learn to use it on a larger scale. Remember, professional editing helps with any problem areas so you always have some suggestions given to improve the manuscript.
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sounds interesting, when I find the time, I'll definitely read it!
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
please do! I look forward to hearing from you!
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Sounds good!
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
lol I think it is :-D
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Sounds exciting :) Can't wait to read it
Posted 12 Years Ago
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12 Years Ago
I just finished the first chapter enjoy!
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Author
Emily Dickinson Jr.FL
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Im just a highschool girl. Writing is my hobby and I think Im fairly good at it but I leave you to be the judge of that. :-)
my best short stories are: http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/poisinros.. more..
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