Doe eyed Romeo

A poem about faaling in love with the perfect guy; a true casanova, a romeo, a knight of chivalry you get the idea.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

My world was cold

It was black and white

Until I saw his hazel eye

 

And my heart beat

Started like a hummingbird

Beating out of my chest

 

He looked right back and stared at me

So dolefully

" will you date me, my fair lady"

 

When I asked why

He looked as if he would cry

and asked

'"Didn't you know?"

"your the very best"

 

And from the moment my heart was chained

To a charmer, A romancer

That I never wished to escape, again

Rose petals on my pillow

 

Lips upon my cheek

Sweet nothings in my ear

Any other modern guy could not meet

My doe eyed Casanova

 

Because I swooped him up

Before any other vixen

Could discover his medieval chivalry

His Fiery inferno of passion

 

I protect him from any hurt

My Romeo, I won't leave alone

And before I know it

 

I'm below a starry sky

With the perfect guy

And he's on one knee

 

He needn't even ask

For I have always been sworn

To his loving doe eyes

 

A one in a million guy

Who could never think to cheat

Would never dare to lie

 

Because his single sweetest weakness

His singlest greatest fear

Is my heartbroken cry

Reviews

[Natasha Hull]

This is a notable progression from the "Cute Love Poem" . You dabble a little in imagery in your second stanza, which is exhilarating.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx lol :-) it has been years since then so I suppose my writing must have changed a bit since then. I rather like imagery and use it quite a lot in some of my poetry.

[Natasha Hull]

Needless to say, a writers ability to write grows with them. And poetry (like wine), is always better once its matured. Not saying that you are immature...don't take it that way:)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

course I know what you're saying. anyone that reads my work can see the fluctuactions because I post poems I'v written though many different ages and just as the experience of the age can't be recovered it shouldn't be forgotten either

[Natasha Hull]

I absolutely agree. Plus, a writer who saves their work will have the ability to look back and see just how much their writing has progressed over time.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

yeah it is a fun thing to do

[Mariah Corey]

That was amazing, ur writing style is so different, its unique. That is a good thing sometimes its better to have your own style of writing than have the same as anyonelse. It makes your writing sparkle even more.
You describe the love u feel as well as what the person looks through their eyes, it perfect. luv it. :D

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I'm so glad you like it! I always try hard to make things interesting I think the worst thing you can be when you write is cliche/ordinary/boring im none of those things and prefer to keep them far from my writing.

[Mariah Corey]

lol. Well it is magnificent. :D

[Stanley Wilson]

brilliant poem!! full of everything you wanted to say to a loved one.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

lol thanx!

[Ufi Auttorri ~ Amy C. T..]

Very nice indeed! I love the flow and imagery and, most certainly, the sentiment. Sempre Fi!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

lol Im glad you like it! the flow and rmotion are very imprtant to me in my poems

[Alyssa Carlstrom]

This is so cute! I love it. :)

[Sleeping Maiden]

Awww! I adore this so much! hehee, i'm a fan of love poems (as i write them myself too). I love the romance and i love how it reminds me of Romeo and Juliet. You took it as your own and made it unique! I love the flow and how it is in sync. =D
Great job!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx so much! I dnt write love poems often so I was worried about what the quality would be

[Sleeping Maiden]

Ohh? Really? well, you did a great job with this one. And don't worry.. just write how you feel.. it is your poem.. it is your own unique self that will shine! =D Splendid write! Keep on writing!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I will dont you worry

[Xerclipse]

He looked write back and stared at me- right back

this is a great love poem. But that's the only error I spotted. I don't usually read love poems but this was cool. You should keep it up. This shows a lot about protection and perfection. Well I am a guy so I could say this poem would also work if the description was about the girl instead of the guy.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

you don't usually read love poems? well thats okay because I usually don't write them lol and thank I try to make poems that both sexes can relate to

[Xerclipse]

lol its okay. It's just that many people here write poems about guys.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

well more girls write than guys at least thats what I find plus most guys who do write won't write love poems

[Xerclipse]

lol that's true. But I find Poetry to be essential either way for writers.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

ahm my mom always wines that my poems are to depressing so I show her a gushy one every once in a while lol