The Caterpillar

An interesting poem abot a caterpillar turning into a butterfly that had quite a few interesting interpretations when viewed as a metaphor. plz read.

 

 

Inch through life

A creature

below notice

Below standards

And Below beauty

 

 

 

 

 

 

Just to survive

 

We grapple

We hide

We climb

We exist

 

Ultimately

Our world goes black

 

The gentle white cotton

Blinds, binds, and mutes

The outside universe

 

Now it's only us

And our cuddly darkness

 

'It must be over'

This life of survival

 

For why else would

There be comforting darkness

 

A delightful abyss

 

Then the cotton falls to pieces

Blinding beams shoot into my world

 

Will the light blind me?

Was I blind before?

 

The rainbow binds my world now

The abyss was finite

And I'm not as I knew

 

I'm a beauty

I have wings

I'm meant to fly

 

So me, this wonderful me

So new

So True

As I fly

Toward sky so blue

 

No cotton walls to contain

No comfort to falsify

Only freedom not denied

 

I'm a senseless, defenceless

Invincible, individual

 

Butterfly

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Tree]

''I'm a beauty /I have wings/ I'm meant to fly.'' These verses alone flapped their delicate wings and flew right off the screen. A poignant piece that could be also a larger metaphor. About the transformation of our own lives. It is always nice when we re/ discover the poet. Very nice piece, EM.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

lol I'm glad you liked it :-) I posted it awhile ago but I decieded to push it to the top cuz I like it a lot.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A really, simple ice poem celebrating the beauty of the transformation from caterpillar to butterfly.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

yup got it in one :-)

[Frieda P]

I'm a butterfly freak so you won me over instantly but this is really good, I love the meaphorposis you penned. Kudos.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx a lot ya know i did mean this as a simple description but a lot of ppl see this as a metaphor for life lol go figure right?

[Frieda P]

And I missed a 't' in there I see, well a lot of people associate butterflys with life and freedom, growth, warriors, it's all the way you look at it...

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

exactly! after all poems can be interpreted millions of ways :-)

[Tex]

wonderfully penned. loved the metaphor about life... it comes through... a very lovely poem thank you for this gift.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

its no problem at all. I have to say I do love using metaphors and comparisons though if youve read my work you coud probaly tell lol :-)

[Tex]

i have read your work... I am Fan of yours

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

that makes me smile so wide you wouldn't believe! :-) I'm so happy people are actually reading my things and like them for years all these poems were laying in old folders and notebooks in the back of my closet

[Tex]

ah... young lady... you should read "closeted poet" by Jo March

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/sondheimkid/1066475/

I think you might relate... Enjoy!

[KAOlmsted]

I really liked this, thank you so much for the read request.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

its always my pleasure and thank you :-)

[Steven Ingels]

This is pretty good

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx :-) I thought so to

[Steven Ingels]

how long have you been writing poetry

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

well it depends I'v always had to write in school. I stated writnig poetry in my notebooks since about 5th grade but I only started actively sharing my work on this site about half a year ago.

[Steven Ingels]

I see your a pretty good writer

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

lol thanx though I guess that opinion varies form person to person poem to poem and all that :-)

[Soul Fire]

Beautiful

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx :-)

[Soul Fire]

You're welcome

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

:-)

[Raef C. Boylan]

I'm not on the Cafe as often as I used to be but I'm always happy to meet new writers on here :)

I liked how you took the caterpillar analogy all the way to the end in such a detailed way. Personally I wasn't keen on how the similar lines "cuddly darkness" and "comforting darkness" were together, felt like they cancelled each other out in a way. Overall, nice piece.

Possible typo:
"senceless" (senseless?)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

:-)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I fix the senseless but cuddly and comforting are synonyms .. I dont like repeating the same word when I can avoid it

[Raef C. Boylan]

That's fair enough, it's your poem :)

[Corset]

such a beautiful poem of metamorphism, I feel a lot like this butterfly of late also, or at least very much my old self again but better now, different, I can very much relate to this wonderful write. well done!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx so much!! I'm glad you like it!!

[Heather]

I love this, its quite good, made me smile. Great write!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I'y always makes me smile to know my poetry has made someone else smile :-)

[Chris]

Quiet and gently said...

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx! glad you appreciate such things