blue to the sun

A poem about someone feeling the emotion of really truly missing someone close to your heart for the first time. PLZ READ!

 

 

 

I'm feeling so blue

I don't know why

Tears in my eyes

 

 

 

Falling down

From the sky

Like rain

On a sunny day

 

 

Something that

Shouldn't be true

Why can't you see

How much I miss you

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Bobbie Coelho]

I think this is a lovely piece, you can see it in your mind's eye. I am not surprised that you were 9, for while reading it that is what I saw: but you have used words to good effect and more powrful becaue this poem is short. The last line is a timebomb, I feel. Very simple; words but what power!!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thank you so much

[Bobbie Coelho]

You are welcome - did you see my comment in response to your plea?

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

no where'd u put it??

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

oh I saw it it!

[Sherman P. Bastarache]

Wow, this is very good! I thought I would tell you so, but I don't expect a review in turn. I actually have nothing writen to review.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Thanx!!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

lol but its old I wrote it when I was nine

[Sherman P. Bastarache]

Really, it seems like something from a mature heart

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Iv always had a mature soul the majority of my poetry is actually from age 6-12 I slowed down once when I got older

[Sherman P. Bastarache]

Are your later works posted on this site as it would be nice to compare them?

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

yeah the princess princess, babe, lil horror shild, precious one, snowing chamber, and black death are all pretty recent along with all my stories

[Sherman P. Bastarache]

Thanks, I will read them!