who did this

This is about the true cruel nature of the world breaking a fragile heart that expresses a true horror at the usually easily accepted fact. plz read

You've said your fine

They've said your crazy

 

And you put it out of your mind

Everyone else just thinks you're out of it

 

The world grows a heart

And you're suprised

Because the world just isn't that fair

 

And you wake sweating

Weeping in a chair

 

The world mocks you again

And you wake up again

It goes on and your fragile heart breaks

 

Shard by shard it disapears

And all that's left is shattered porcelein

 

In 1,000 worlds a shard is picked up

And they say all at once

"Who did this?"

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Craig2591]

First of all... thanks for entering my contest. Very nice poem. My only complaint is that you use "your" when you should be using "you're" in a lot of places. Otherwise, good job.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Fixed it

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

Yes! This is my experience exactly lately. I used to see all people as fundamentally good, I'm almost having an "ah-ha" moment.

[Cynthia Man]

I could feel a strong emotion from this poem, it's true, the world is cruel, and we all have to fight through it somehow. However, this unfairness somehow breaks people much, thats why the world is never easy. But I believe that finding love in this world can cure us .
Anyways, A great write! Nice written!~

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx!!! I'm glad you enjoyed this :-)

[Cynthia Man]

ur welcome :D:D

[kendra14(:]

really great it was really interesting!(:

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Y'all are so nice :-)

[Lisa Ring]

What I like about your writing is that it feels like it comes from a very personal place. It feels like your raw emotions and thoughts straight from your head.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Aww thanx so much! Lisa the truth is I havent gone through to much emotional pain at least compared to others I know but I feel that when you write whatever you write if your not feeling the emotion of the pov your writing in you are greatly insulting those that have gone throgh the situation your writing in. So I always feel as I write I don't think I let the emotions come and the words craft around a feeling.

[Woja]

I believe you ment all at once. We can never trully escape our past

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

yup! thanx ill just go and fix that! lol