Princess, Princess

a poem about feminine empowerment with a different spin read it to find out its a poem it wont take long

Softly like a bell jingling in the breeze

 

And as blunt as an arrow

Rebounding off a tree

 

Are her voice and attitude

Both truly fair

And much appreciated by her Prince Charming

 

But only as soon as his steed and he

Can bother to be there

 

Months, go by, others days and weeks

And she stays put

Patiently swaying in the breeze

 

Like a peony she grows delicate

As if by such as a mere sneeze

Could snuff out her existance

 

And as you please, she leaves

With velvet slipers upon her feet

 

She scales her own tower, only in reverse

She defeats the dragon, kills the witch

This princess takes down her own curse

 

Without a hitch she walks on and on

More pincesses escape

And now the princes must wait

 

They giggle and play

With the nymphs and the elves

Altogether free always better never worse

 

And when they go

This time to save a prince

They take with them

A magic in the air

 

They leave some behind

Magic twinkles by the jars in the shelves

Knowing not a princess will ever

Give into fate

 

And never again was there a prince

Who would ever dare be late

 

 

 

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The Cheetah Girls - Cinderella

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Reviews

[LOfCharlemagne]

Very intresting read. Great detail and imagination, it works really well in this poem. You have a very strong introduction sentence, which is great! It keeps the attention of the reader very well, and it is very fast paced. I love it, congratulations.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx! i was a little worried it was to long and confusing! lol im glad it works :-)

[LOfCharlemagne]

It works very well! Don't worry about length. Try to fit as much quality material into it as you can without being overbearing. If you can keep your readers attention, then length is no issue. But your story does hold that attention, so good job on that!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Yay! :-D

[Yheela]

^.^
I wonder if princes even dare to be princes anymore, the princesses would smack them on the head for thinking that a princess can't save herself.
Lovely poem!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

lol thank you!

[♥ Kinnixk]

Great job Hannah! It reminds me of Shreak 3 I think it was.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

shreak 3 ??? whats that?

[♥ Kinnixk]

o.O... shrek and fiona..or something like that. i think i spelled it wrong..oops xD lol

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

oh lol I get it now!

[Rose Kavanagh]

I really like this, it's an interesting take on the traditional "damsel in distress" formula. I especially like:

And never again was there a prince
Who would ever dare be late

It's funny and whimsical. Keep up the good work!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx! but its so true when you think of it princesses spend their whole lives in towers and wait and wait and wait untill a man can bother to get them and then i think like y? y cnt they just rescue themselves? its not fair