Traitor

A poem about knowing people are hiding something cruel from you read it if you wna knw more! :-D

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Be a fighter

 

Chin high

Soul gone

 

Ice cold eyes

Nothing won

 

They'll never know

And you'll never tell

All that has happened

To you in that hell

 

Didn't they see

What could happen there

 

With nothing allowed

And no room for fear

 

I'll bet they say no

And always deny

 

The truth that we know

When we look in their eyes

 

As our soul cries

Reviews

[Cool Handless Luke]

Very well thought out. As a soldier who has participated in war I have seen many looks in many eyes on both sides of the ponds. Some you don't like even when they are on your side. I like this very much - very well put!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Im glad you liked it :-) I actually didnt initially write it about wars and such but its always interesting to see others perspectives on my poems as I keep them open for much interpretation

[Joey Johnson]

Great job.

[Japanese Cherry]

Wonderful job. I loved that I could paint a picture in my head as I read from your great use in imagery... I should come to you whenever i have drawing block ^_^

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

hey I'd be happy to help you out. my friends say I'm like draino on the mind lol

[Japanese Cherry]

haha! well, i have a few ideas, but when i run out, i'll definitely ask you for help!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

coolio :-D

[Heromen Selena]

Great picture you painted for us. Nice imagery and wonderful words :)

[Rob Santana]

Wow,interesting. How many people walk around on a daily basis with secrets and yet act like nothing has happened.the truth that we know when we looks in their eyes that's my favorite line.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx creeper I'm glad you enjoyed my work :-) I rather like the last line to I feel it gives it more of an echo if you know what I mean

[♥ Kinnixk]

Very mind-blowing poetry Hannah :) I love LOVE the third stanza. Wonderful :)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thats my favorite stanza 2!!!! glad you liked it :-)

[Patrick Henry]

Wow!! Either this is death row and the most scariest dude on the planet is sweating like crazy from nerves ooooor the subject is waiting to go into gym class and worries himself silly about the bullies in their!! lol This can go everywhere. I love it. Love those first 3 stanzas. Brutal honesty of bravery being misplaced, and recognized for failure in its end. Maybe this is abut a hospital visit... : ) I don't think I want to know so I read it again!! Beautiful Emily Dickinson Jr.. xoxo -Mark

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

aww thanx mark!! I'm so glad you liked it! :-)

[Alexa Tasch]

Very powerful and dark! It shows how you feel clearly and it is well written!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx alexa!!! :-)

[Alexa Tasch]

you're welcome!! :)

[Castonovia]

Very awe inspiring write with such raw, honest emotions, love the last line indeed :)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx! I like to release myself from reality into my poetry. I always say if noone understands you write a poem cuz then even a stranger can feel ur pain.

[PetiteGemini]

This explains how a lot of people feel. Very well done. :)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx d.w I thought so to