Big brother's bed

no this is not about incest you pervs! get your minds out of the gutter It's about a pure little girls delight in the simple things in life :-)

It feels good, I'm light

I feel flowy

I could take flight

I'm almost gone

And then I'm back

My world turns gold

Instead of black

I sink deep

And let out a sigh

What a heavenly night

Davey's bed would never deny

Now instead of light

I'm heavy

My limbs like their made of jelly

Mornings come

The birds do sing

The only way to describe

Is if you truly do

Know what I mean

Reviews

[Japanese Cherry]

Very nice job... I enjoyed reading this lovely piece

[Tina Kline]

Yes, we all have places were we feel safe, content and where we can just relax. I like this poem, very positive and enjoyable.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx :-)

[S]

Very sweet...

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Im glad you think so

[kublakhan27]

I totally get where you're coming from, and this is a very pretty piece as I read it, but in reality there will always be the occasional reader that interprets it as something more sinister than you intended. That's not necessarily a bad thing though...it means your writing is rich enough to invoke a variety of emotions :P But my interpretation does sympathize with yours and I love how you've portrayed the essence of childhood in its most innocent of states :)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I know! I myself realized that was quite likely to happen. Thats why I put the description that is meant to be read with a light and innocent heart. I'm glad you liked my portrayal.

[kublakhan27]

No problem :)

[.]

Great rhyme and flow! I loved it! 100/100 :)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx kat!!! :-)

[.]

U're welcome! :)

[Rtrt]

Very nice job. We all have places like this that make us feel content and secure. And you words remind me of mine.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

aww thanx R Im glad my poem gave u such good thoughts

[Tate Morgan]

Very nice I always like to see poetry that tells a story but doesnt tell others how to feel or drown in adjectives

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

hahah thanx most of my poetry does tell some story or another im glad you enjoyed it :-)

[Tate Morgan]

youll find mine do as well I write on every subject but about things i know and have experienced

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I write about everything as well. you could say I write like an actor acts. I become whom I write and I feel everthing they would as I write. Often im left with goosebumps up and down my arms as an affect thouh from some of the more emotional pieces.

[Tate Morgan]

In my own if i feel it i know others will;

[Steven Cash]

Real real nice

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx

[ms. barrie]

exquisitely written, i love how it flows. bygone fairy tale innocence, faded: lovely poem, a really enjoyable read!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx barrie Im glad you enjoyed it so! :-)