black fades blue

It's about the pain becoming to much to bear to consuming about hiding your true self and about the blindness of others PLZ READ!

It’s light, its light

Be strong with all your might

I feel so drained

My spirits strained

The end is nearing

The darks caving in

The smile that hid

Is collapsing

Amid all the murder

Chaos ensues

The color that spreads

Is endless black

And sorrowful

Blue

Devil eyes

Staring back so alive

I’m left alone forgotten

You make me feel so rotten

My air is gone

The devil nears

I smile in waiting

But I scream when I know

That everyones hating

The smile conceals the devil's eyes

The fools smile you see

It's all me you see

Or at least

It covers what

You could never read

All that’s underneath

You don't even see

A single part of me

You’re the ocean's waves

You brush right over me

Reviews

[Ryan Zeller]

The first two lines reminded me a lot of "Do not go gentle into that good night" by Dylan Thomas. http://www.poets.org/viewmedia.php/prmMID/15377

People usually hate being reminded to check their grammar/punctuation/spelling, but here's one more reminder! It's incredibly important to get everything, or else people won't respect the content of your writing. Remember to double check things like "your/you're," as well as filling in those missing possessive apostrophes. "Callapsing" should be "collapsing."

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I actually like the reminders it helps me improve my work :-)