Crimson Truths

I based this poem off the anime inuyasha. It's about a cold, cruel man finding out he loves a woman but not untill it is far to late

Rose, rose, rose

Crimson drops they fall

 

You see perfection

 

It hates and kills me

But I'll stay standing

 

I'll scream at it

No fear with a knife

And a claw at my throat

 

You'll look in my eye

You'll never admit it

But you're in love

 

You want to taint snow

With a lowly creature

 

So you sneer

You lash at me

Your image disapears

 

You are a lord

You're not modest at least

 

But when you see me sob

 

For the first time

Privy to my broken heart

You can't help but want a piece

 

As I lay broken

In puddles of blood

You see my porcelein face

And your permanent sneer

Is erased

 

Somehow I've changed

Yet I've stayed the same

Fair skin, rainbow eyes

Ruby lips

 

You've never known before

 

Big suprise

As I lay quite

I take my dying breath

 

You ogle

What your foolish

Mind, could never see

That your insightful heart

Could mournfully

Always see

 

As I whisper

" My prince, this is me."

 

So as you cry

for the very first time

Your frozen heart dies

 

And you see the monster you are

As you cry under those cruel unfeeling

Stars

 

When you look into

Your own

Amber eyes, only

Truly saw

Reflected in my

Crimson pond

 

© 2012 Emily Dickinson Jr.  All rights reserved

Reviews

[Dr. Wood ?]

another great write...(you need to put a letter 'R' in porcelain and dying is not dieing...I do it all the time....Really good though..I LOVED the whisper

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

ooooh great catch!!! thanx :-) I'll get right on that! haha :-) wud you believe me if I told you I was twelve when I wrote this and haven't changed a word of it?

[Dr. Wood ?]

I would....I wrote my first poem at the age of about eight..BAD...but it started me off

[Dr. Wood ?]

yes i read Isaac Newton and reviewed it.....So many on this site it is easy to lose track

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

my first poem was about 10ish well my first decent one. it was... wonderful .... but my mother lost it and I cnt recreate it. It was so wonderful my teacher accused me of plagerizing. I was honored. how I miss that poem....

[Dr. Wood ?]

sore news....Golden rule then applied..write it down and KEEP it...of course now with hard drives it is so much easier...you are obviously a born poet.....I always believed I was meant to rhyme words..I even think in rhyme..I do free verse..just posted one Tumbleweed Town..a bit of dark humour and lots of killing..not like anything I have ever done before..But this site does help to expand you

[Sami Khalil]

As I lay broken
in puddles of blood...
Well penned.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Thanx Sami!!!

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...

[SmileBig :)]

Really really think this is wonderful :) fantastic job!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Glad you like it!! thanx so much :-)

[SmileBig :)]

No problem :)

[Steven Cash]

How many ways can I say amazing?

100/100

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

its always great to hear from you steve
im rly glad you enjoyed it so much!

[Steven Cash]

it's no problem

and it was really good

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

lol im rl happy you like it!! :-) you guys rly make my day or night as is the case now

[Shelley Holt-Lowrey]

Writer! You are awesome. I enjoyed this much. I don't "get" poetry sometimes... This one just speaks o me. I will work toward reading your stories. I can be of more help there. Welcome.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I'm really glad you enjoyed it lol :-D I always look forward to reviews thanx

[Yheela]

Oh, loved this!
Snow White and Beauty and the Beast¨and every other fairy tale all rolled into one - or that's how I saw it.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I actually based it off a feudal fairy tale from japan so thats probally why you got that vibe. I'm glad you enjoyed it!! :-)

[Yheela]

Not too far off then! ^_^

[kublakhan27]

Haha I don't watch it much, mainly cuz he irritates me :P This is really sweet though...I can picture this coming from Kagome (can't remember how it's spelled) for sure...nice job :)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

no, you spelled it right! :-) it irritates you? do you watch the dub version? cuz the dub version irritates me to.

[kublakhan27]

:) Yeah mostly the dubs but then again, I don't really like dubs in general...some shows have the odd funny one but that's about it lol

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

i dnt like dubs they grate on my nerves the voices are just to stupid

[kublakhan27]

lol exactly :P

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

if you keep up with the subs though the voices are a lot better

[kublakhan27]

Yeah it makes sense really...since most of the shows are Japanese they're meant to be watched in that language...as soon as you put another language on top of that, the plots/moods suffer for it...thankfully there are a few good sites where you can watch the originals, I just hope they never get shut down :P

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

of course!! I know loads

[kublakhan27]

:)

[Admiral Kirk]

WOW THIS IS AWESOME!!! I LOVE IT!!! IT'S SO EMOTIONAL AND BEAUTIFUL IT FEELS INAPPROPRIATE TO PUT THE REVIEW IN ALL CAPS BUT I'M DOING IT ANYWAY!!! WOW THE IMAGERY IS AMAZING AND THE STORY IT TELLS AND THE STORY BEHIND IT... GENIUS!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Lol I'm glad you enjoyed it!!! I dnt mind the caps they just show how much you liked it and that just maked me all the happier :-)

[Admiral Kirk]

NO PROBLEM! THAT'S GREAT I LIKE CAPS TOO!!! :D