Crimson Truths

I based this poem off the anime inuyasha. It's about a cold, cruel man finding out he loves a woman but not untill it is far to late

Rose, rose, rose

Crimson drops they fall

 

You see perfection

 

It hates and kills me

But I'll stay standing

 

I'll scream at it

No fear with a knife

And a claw at my throat

 

You'll look in my eye

You'll never admit it

But you're in love

 

You want to taint snow

With a lowly creature

 

So you sneer

You lash at me

Your image disapears

 

You are a lord

You're not modest at least

 

But when you see me sob

 

For the first time

Privy to my broken heart

You can't help but want a piece

 

As I lay broken

In puddles of blood

You see my porcelein face

And your permanent sneer

Is erased

 

Somehow I've changed

Yet I've stayed the same

Fair skin, rainbow eyes

Ruby lips

 

You've never known before

 

Big suprise

As I lay quite

I take my dying breath

 

You ogle

What your foolish

Mind, could never see

That your insightful heart

Could mournfully

Always see

 

As I whisper

" My prince, this is me."

 

So as you cry

for the very first time

Your frozen heart dies

 

And you see the monster you are

As you cry under those cruel unfeeling

Stars

 

When you look into

Your own

Amber eyes, only

Truly saw

Reflected in my

Crimson pond

 

© 2012 Emily Dickinson Jr.  All rights reserved

Reviews

[Sherman P. Bastarache]

I knew you were good enough! Congratulations!!! I tweeted, FB, and shared it on my Google. I am so proud of you!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Lop thanks so much!! I'm so happy this poems getting around since it is a personal favorite of mine even though it is fairly old.

[Acer]

Again, nice work, lovely written indeed. Liked it again, this time i won't say that i loved this line or that stanza, because, this time i like your whole poem.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

awww thats sweet thanx so much :-)

[Acer]

your welcome, loved your writings always indeed.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

im glad you do :-) I live to please

[Acer]

My pleasure :*), you've a great talent if a truly say.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx! :-)

[Acer]

My pleasure once again :)

[Black Rose]

Beautiful!!!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx so much :-) im glad you think so.

[Jack...]

Almost saying "I told you so," in a beatifully poetic way. This was a journey through swaying branches and opaque glass only revealing itself to those who truly believe and understand. Very nicely done.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thats exaclty the idea! lol
Im glad you could appreciate how I expressed the sentiment

[Frieda P]

It's like Beauty and the Beast personified and turned inside out. I like the places you took me with your vivid descriptions, love this part the absolute best....

'want to taint snow
With a lowly creature'

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I like that part a lot 2! when I read it aloud I put a lot of sas and irony into that part lol

[Natasha Hull]

Indeed. I believe you have nailed it on this one. While it may be geared towards love, it is anything but cliché. I was draw into this poem through your use of imagery. You showed the reader the emotions, instead of telling them...which is what every poet should do. Well done.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx T.R :-) lol I told you not to let those first two poems fool you :-P I'm really happy you could appreciate it

[Larry Dyson]

only goes to show you how we all trust and like you John!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

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[John Phoenix Hutchinson..]

Congratulations this poem has been "approved" for publication in...

THE MAGICAL MYTHICAL MYSTERY COMPENDIUM.

-Fantasy and Factual Poems of the Arcane.

By John Phoenix Hutchinson and Others. (c) 2012

Please feel free to submit other poems as you are not limited to one entry. Also please write a short "bio" about yourself and send to me via private message. This will be published along with your poem. Thanks J.P.H.

Anyone wanting to make Submissions to this Writers Cafe "e" book Project can do so on my group page, the deadline is 1st of November 2012.

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

The fairytale vibe made this a much easier choice than your blood violet poem. Great poem well done.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Thanx so much John! I'll send that as soon as I am able. by blood violet are you refering to blood lily?

[John Phoenix Hutchinson.]

Yes sorry. You would not believe how many poems I have read the last two days with more to come hopefully :)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Lol well good luck!! :-)

[lothlorienwriter]

This read to me like a fairytale but a lamentable one at that. Although in a way a truth shone through it in the form of an enlightenment. Ah the myth of love.......

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

It really makes sense that it came across as a fairytale! This is because it was based off a japanese animation called animation which is based off a fuedal fairytale. I'm really glad you enjoyed it. I aim in all my poems to teach in one way or another and I always like it best when someone is able to walk away with a realisation! :-)

[Tate Morgan]

Starnge how the laments of the broken heart affect us all.We lose our hate and feel empathy and then we become human

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

amen to that :-)