People

READ it!!!!!! plz? pretty plz?

Showers fall down

To crimson pond

 

Scarlet flowers

Stars beyond

 

Showers, Crystal

Flower's gift

 

It's beauty nearly

Just nearly

Bridges the rift

 

The giggles taunt

Yet beg for followers

They swoon only to fall

 

The petals droop and give

But the survivors

Stand tall

 

 

With the promise

That before

The others thought laughable

 

Now they

Start again

 

The cycle remains

The memories stained

The memories remained

 

Reviews

[Falling Leaf.]

Hmmmmm...this provoked a lot of thought for me. You titled this piece People, so I was determined to figure out the meaning. What I got of it was this:
The beautiful, carefree women will soon fall. Surface beauty doesn't last. Those of us who rely on deeper virtues will survive through the tough times, i.e. high school. "The cycle remains" this makes me think that no matter what, we can't change what the beautiful yet rotten girls will think of us. "Memories stained, remained." We let the beautiful rotten girls get to us, and now we will never truly be sure of ourselves.


Now, I don't know if this is even close to what your message was, but it's what I got, nevertheless.

A good read! Bravo!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

it was pretty close actually! though it was never rly meant to be understood its one of those poems that I want ppl to analyze and figure out what it means to them in their hearts. For me this poem is about the taint brought upon those as innocent as nature and the scar and taint that stains their souls as they continue throught life because of it.

[Falling Leaf.]

A great message, Hannah. The best thing is it is one that can stem off into a million different variations of it, depending on the heart of the reader and what experiences they've been through. I took out of it what I did because I've dealt with "the pretties" before. Thank you

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

then this poem has done its job! :-) and ur very welcome

[James William Dyer]

I really liked the final stanza, and the use of meter and rhyme throughout

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx! :-) honestly i dnt even realize when i use it or dont.

[Blue Ivory]

Dark and beautiful! I like it :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I found this one difficult to fathom. It felt as if it had different messages but no single one.

[Romantic old soul]

God job!
a hurt persons' life perhaps? hurt caused by the church maybe? Or perhaps so called good people?
Very intriguing.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I could see this being about a few things including the deception of the church or judgment day on Earth. Interesting piece.

[Alexa Tasch]

Wow! This was very beautiful! You word choice is amazing and the stanzas flow perfectly together. I loved the last two lines the most. They are really powerful and bring the message home. This was great!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

aww thanx alexa :-) I'm glad you liked it!

[Alexa Tasch]

You're welcome!! :)

[Jordan's Back]

i really Liked this, Its kind of an anthem for all us who are rising out of hell's ash heap. Wonderful Write!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

aww thanx!! :-D

[Jordan's Back]

The Edit it good too, Got more of a smoother flow with this one

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

yeah it was like that first to but for some reason when I saved it it didn't transfer over lol this site rly acts weird with my laptop.

[Jordan's Back]

Hunni This Website acts weird With EVERYBODYS laptop LOL I know I been on here a year.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

well ..... they should fix it! :-P

[Jordan's Back]

Well they tried, but Charles Konsor (The site owner) Said he tries to do it cheaply as possible so he can keep it free

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

ah! that makes sense :-) Maybe they shud make a premium membership like some sites do?

[Jordan's Back]

He thought about that, but I think he is debating wether it goes against his moral regarding free expression or not idk :P

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

in my opinion he should keep this format as the free version but for premium members push them higher on the list of who appears for being read and maybe some advertisement for their poems for a specific number maybe a limit of 3-4 at a time. At least thats an idea this is still the best free site I'v found so far lol

[Jordan's Back]

I will get his info and you can send it to him :) He might like that idea

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

lol sure always free to share my thought with others

[Jordan's Back]

Alright :)

[McKinleyA]

Mysterious and intriguing, a wonderful mix! Awesome job.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx so much!