Lost in questions

This is about a girl whos treated horribly and how she sees the world read plz!

 

 

 

When I seek answers

They tease and trash me

 

When I seek love

I don't deserve it

 

When I seek strength

It's so close, but forever

Out of my reach

As everything always is

 

When I ask why, I

Am shunned for what, they

Could never understand

 

So I close my eyes

My world to everything off

 

I'll stay by nature

For it's always there

As opposed to what's never there

 

Answers are scarce

Thinking is only reached by stars

And trust was lost

on the day of clouds

 

Love became a treasure

never to be found

When it blended to

The sparkle drops

 

And the threatening yet

Comforting cold

That is still here

through heart stilling

Shivering fear

 

These are hidden

In my nothings

And I don't cares

 

But you'll never know

For your somebody

Where Im nothing and nobody

 

That has a hidden something

and everything

hidden deep inside

Reviews

[Castonovia]

Ooooooh, very cryptic and emotional... questions left unanswered and in their place either more questions or a hollow feeling for being shunned when not knowing in the first place. People say to ask away, but then again when you do sometimes it's like curiousity killed the cat. A new, unforgiving world still full of hidden meaning ;)

[kublakhan27]

It gets more powerful as it goes...great work^^

[Becca Bishop]

Man, I love the first four stanzas. I've felt like that before and tried to describe it, but you've captured the true meaning better than I ever could. One thing I really love about words and writing is the strong emotions they can portray - as you have done in this poem. One thing I hate is that sometimes words aren't enough to describe what we're feeling. I can't explain what I felt after reading this poem but it was strong. Ok, I'm sorry :P This sounds so cheesy. I can't explain how I can't explain how I feel about your poem so I'll just shut up :P Lovely, lovely, lovely write :)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

well i for one love this review! thank you so much!

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hi Emily, read it several times and found it easy at one level but difficult at another. I found myself feeling it about self doubt but it sort of felt as if it was trying to stray elsewhere. Some excellent lines.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx so much john! that is certainly one of my poems that is multifacetedit is one I believe will mean something very different to each that read it.