I'm a history nerd, so seeing the words "Black Death" drew me right in. I liked this one quite a bit, my favorite piece of yours that I've read so far. I absolutely love this line:
""Sinners will fall'
Is the message sent
That is
Until each pope falls"
Keep up the good work :)
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
lol nice. I have to admit I'm a bit of a history nerd to, the poem was probaly a bit of a hint. I'.. read morelol nice. I have to admit I'm a bit of a history nerd to, the poem was probaly a bit of a hint. I'm really glad you liked it, I actualy wrote in middle-school while they were teaching it. :-) Of course I will always keep it up tis my pleasure.
Okay, you may just be Robert Frost :)P
No but really I loved it, very moving, Great write :)
Posted 12 Years Ago
12 Years Ago
aww thanx so much!! I love robert frost and when i took an online test to see which poet I was most.. read moreaww thanx so much!! I love robert frost and when i took an online test to see which poet I was most like it said him to lol :-D
Powerful!
The Popes, indeed, I was pleased to see that imagery within this poem, those who preach, often fall themselves but oh do they make out the "sinner" part first...in the end, what matters is that we understand connection before our fall...
Imagery here is wonderfully presented!
xox
The world had bad days. Sickness once controlled our world. Half the population was lost. This new world had sickness that killed millions monthly and few give a nickel. Hunger and HIV is alive and strong. A powerful poem. Based on history make poetry scary and real. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote
I am currently writing a paper on the Black Death and I was thrilled to run across this piece. I really like the premise of this poem. You manage to capture the rapidity and ruthlessness with which the Plague took victims. I feel the poem may be supplemented by adding some more onomatopoeia like that which you started with. This could help heighten the rapidity and darkness that is established at the beginning. Also, the sudden leaving off of rhyming disrupted the flow of it for me. If you are going to have a rhyming pattern, it should carry through or not be there at all.
I love how you've drawn a perfect line between body and soul as it relates to harbingers of mass deaths, like plagues or wars (those two phenomena have always been married in my mind)...great :)
Posted 12 Years Ago
12 Years Ago
aww thanx so much kub I'm glad you enjoyed it I'v always had a sort of fascination with plagues
Oh, such amazement, love all things related to the bubonic plague, but this took the cake with a tad alliteration, some rythme, a bit of plight from a dreadful blight... Dank and so very horrifying. Well penned piece indeed, especially the pope part ;)
Posted 12 Years Ago
12 Years Ago
aww thanx so much chelsea!!!
12 Years Ago
My pleasure :p
12 Years Ago
Im personally a bit of a history nut :-)
12 Years Ago
Me too, though I have to say beyond the plague and death Cleopatra would have to be my favorite... t.. read moreMe too, though I have to say beyond the plague and death Cleopatra would have to be my favorite... though that does have a bit of suspense as well. Mythology with a hint of history--- awesome--- the dark parts in time :p
12 Years Ago
I like the pague, yellow fever, queen elizibeth and bloody mary, and the holocaust
Wow intense I like the Renaissance, the bubonic plague, medeival ages, and everything you've said. D.. read moreWow intense I like the Renaissance, the bubonic plague, medeival ages, and everything you've said. Dark, but awesome.
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