The Holocaust

It's a poem based on the gas chambers during the holocaust from the perspective of an innocent little boy with his mother

"It's Snowing!

Mommy, it's snowing!"

But it doesn't snow

Indoors

"Mommy,

Why does the snow

Burn?"

She can't

Or won't answer

"Stop it, No!

 ... Why are we melting?"

Salt water

Pouring down every face
Is the hopeless

Response

 

 

"This isn't snow."
"Darling, it's not."

That's what she says
As her lips

Leave her face

 

Silence reins supreme

No more mommy

Or little boy

And no other

 Little boy

 Heeded
His many screams

Reviews

[Natasha Hull]

I had to double check, and make sure that I was still reading your poetry. This is an extreme jump from the few I have read. What a wonderful surprise! This poem is INTENSE! And having drawn this sort of imagery to express the sadness of the holocaust...is genius!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

yup it's all me :-) this one is more recent I wrote it three years ago when I was a freshman. I wrote it during history class while watching the movie the boy in striped pajamas. absolutely heartbreaking movie. have you seen it?

[Matt Gandee]

Very powerful idea, executed *almost* perfectly; the spelling errors took me out of it too much for this piece to resonate as deeply as it should have. I'd recommend more extensive proof-reading, but as far as the creative process itself goes, I can't fault this in any other way. Impressive!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

lol thanx I'll try to go back and edit a bit :-D

[Bayandur Pogosyan]

Well I guess "response" should be written with an S, but other than that - "The snowing Chamber" is written with passion, and it made me shiver.

The vocabulary is a bit uneven, the rhythmical pattern too. But that's going to come with experience.

I'd advice the author to find a professional writer, someone she admires, and start writing to him, that would help her a lot. It's not the best idea to let her talent go to waste in amateur context.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Sadly I do not know any writers and this site is the first time Iv posted any of my works.

[Bayandur Pogosyan]

Well who do you like, from modern ones?

[Bayandur Pogosyan]

Those who are still living, I mean.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I like emily dickinson as you may have guessed from my nickname

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

oo wait shes dead ..... I like Tomara pierce I think she's alive i also like J.K Rolling

[Bayandur Pogosyan]

Because of the huge volume of requests coming in, J.K. Rowling also regrets she is unable to:

Answer individual questions or comment on specific topics from readers

Read or comment on writing, stories, ideas or artwork
I guess it's going to be a bit harder than I first thought. Let's try Pierce.

[Bayandur Pogosyan]

http://tammypierce.livejournal.com/
Here you can contact here. I believe she'll answer. Let me know of the result.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Ill be sure to this is really cool how you found her!!

[Bayandur Pogosyan]

:) Google and Wikipedia.

[zainul]

Lovely write.
Emotion plays well in this poem nicely.
Love the following line:
Silence reins supreme

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Im glad you liked it!! I also like that line as well :-)

[zainul]

It is a very meaningful too.
Thanks for your gesture

[.]

Wow this is intense lol. Good job

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I'm glad you liked it!!

[Mari ana biossat]

A creative write. I like it.