I had to double check, and make sure that I was still reading your poetry. This is an extreme jump from the few I have read. What a wonderful surprise! This poem is INTENSE! And having drawn this sort of imagery to express the sadness of the holocaust...is genius!
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
yup it's all me :-) this one is more recent I wrote it three years ago when I was a freshman. I wro.. read moreyup it's all me :-) this one is more recent I wrote it three years ago when I was a freshman. I wrote it during history class while watching the movie the boy in striped pajamas. absolutely heartbreaking movie. have you seen it?
This is very good. I feel very much that the snow is not snow, as you stated, but the world. The world destroys us all and tears us apart. Good job. Keep writing.
It's about the gas chambers of the holocaust but I suppose u cud look at it that way to. I'm glad y.. read moreIt's about the gas chambers of the holocaust but I suppose u cud look at it that way to. I'm glad you liked it
11 Years Ago
I'm sorry. I see where you put that up there now. I didn't see it before. I have a better view on th.. read moreI'm sorry. I see where you put that up there now. I didn't see it before. I have a better view on this poem now. Very, very good job.
This is such a heart breaking poem, and the graphical writing makes it so much more powerful and more real...the picture gets stuck in the brain...it's an incredible write!!!
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
thanx so much akshita!! its one of my favorites as well I fashioned it off the movie a boy in strip.. read morethanx so much akshita!! its one of my favorites as well I fashioned it off the movie a boy in striped pajamas. I wrote it when I was a feshman. Its good that it stays in yuor head because this is a piece of history that would be dangerous to forget
these days you need to shock ppl to make them see at least thats my belief. ppl r too detached to r.. read morethese days you need to shock ppl to make them see at least thats my belief. ppl r too detached to relate to anything they arent forced to feel ;very in your face
11 Years Ago
oh! and thank you can never forget the thank you hehehe
"It's Snowing! Mommy, it's snowing!"
But it doesn't snow indoors
That line just tore my heart, so sad! >-<
That was great, and I agree with Nicholas Bernard Rowe, the boy in the striped pajamas was a great movie and what came mind when reading this. Sad movie and poem but yet displays the innocence of the mind of the child who was punished having no debt to pay and had no idea of what he was accused of. Great poem ^-^
wow I wish i went to your school The boy in the striped pajamas was an amazing movie... almost as good as this little poem. simply amazing... a profound and deeply moving write. might be a little heavy reading for me on Xmas eve however, but it serves me right for looking for gems tonight... I found one here... Thank you for this.
100/100
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
thanx nicholas I'm glad you liked it! :-) your right though this definately isnt chritmas reading l.. read morethanx nicholas I'm glad you liked it! :-) your right though this definately isnt chritmas reading lol
I had to double check, and make sure that I was still reading your poetry. This is an extreme jump from the few I have read. What a wonderful surprise! This poem is INTENSE! And having drawn this sort of imagery to express the sadness of the holocaust...is genius!
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
yup it's all me :-) this one is more recent I wrote it three years ago when I was a freshman. I wro.. read moreyup it's all me :-) this one is more recent I wrote it three years ago when I was a freshman. I wrote it during history class while watching the movie the boy in striped pajamas. absolutely heartbreaking movie. have you seen it?
Chilling and thrilling with strong descriptions and equally haunting storytelling... especially the boldfaced aspect of it to draw more towards those words, but also adding to the kid's quotes. Well penned ghastly piece indeed!!! :)
Posted 12 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
thanx chelsea!! I thought the bold would draw more attention to the duality of the poem and persona.. read morethanx chelsea!! I thought the bold would draw more attention to the duality of the poem and personalities of the different individuals
Im just a highschool girl. Writing is my hobby and I think Im fairly good at it but I leave you to be the judge of that. :-)
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