What happens when you play god?

poem bout a cherub who cuz she's bored begins 2 toy with ppl's lives She treats them like toys an goes on about the effect of her actions an how something once pure cud go so wrong an evil

On a whim, floats a cloud

With a winged Babe aloft

 

Every good, and every bad

Is laughed at

And written on a writing pad

 

The dollies start to break

And a winged child grows bored

 

Another soul has fallen

And soon Babe has an ocean

 

 

Babe is still bored, and smirks

As she floats on her toy she has wrought

 

She plays with her toys, and the cries increase
Babe soon gets angry; they call her cruel, a beast

Little winged Babe, sinks to the ground
She stomps her feet

 

Pound!Pound!

Pound!Pound!

 

Her oceans now vast, the cries feed its yearn
And now it grows violent

 

The world is shown Babe's scorn

She floats, and she glares; she sinks even lower
As her broken toys turn on her, she runs for cover

 

A cherub once born, now feared as the devil
Baby blue eye's now angry, turn yellow

 

Babe will sink deeper and scream
And her toys will still cry

And call her real mean

 

And still she grows cold, Frozen

In the flames she still lies

 

Her wings disintegrated, while her halo fries

 

She doesn't scream

But her toys

They will die

 

Then she'll play puppets

While she sinks

Where she lies

 

 

© 2012 Emily Dickinson Jr.  All rights reserved

Reviews

[LOfCharlemagne]

Very intresting. It so so diverse from most poems and has a very abstract feel to it. I like that. Like the majority of your poems I have read, it is very well done and enjoyable. However, i do suggest explaining what is going on a little better, as the reader does get somewhat confused from time to time in this. It is a great poem, just could use a little more explination!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I usually dnt offer much explanation cuz i like pply to come to their own conclusion after analysis but maybe your right some people don't like that

[LOfCharlemagne]

Dont get me wrong, it is good...just feels kind of confusing and unorganized at spots. Didn't make me love it any less though :)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Which parts were confusing???

[LOfCharlemagne]

In the start you are speaking about a cloud with a baby, and then it switches to dollies. Thats a real change up. Then things go haywire and it appears to be because babe is bored. Then I assume everybody thinks she is mean because she ate people. Thats just how it appears to me.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Babe is a cherub an angel on a cloud . she gets bored and starts toying with humans on earth and they became her "dollies" and its all about how that goes wrong and turns an angel once pure into something wrong and evil , does it make more sense when you read it like that???

[LOfCharlemagne]

Yes, that makes much more sense! Thank you :)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

lol thanx! anything else confuse you now that you got the main idea of the poem?

[LOfCharlemagne]

Not really, I understand now. Its really a good poem! If you get a chance, you should read my poem. You might like it. If your into superheros, you should also check out my story "A letter to Charlemagne"! :)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

sure! sounds kool I'v always like the name charlemagne :-) remingds me of my historical fiction books alot for some reason lol

[LOfCharlemagne]

Because Charlemagne(the historical figure) was a turkish king around 900 AD. I always thought it sounded like a superhero, so i made him one :D

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Oh! so that's y he sounded familiar! lol

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

very interesting! You lead us on a scary journey in babe's world! Excellent descriptions!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I'm really glad you liked it its my favorite poem its my little baby

[Serenity Faith]

I loved the analogies in this piece! The poor people that are Babe's toys. Excellent write, and very entertaining. Keep it up!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx so much! its a personal favorite of mine lol

[Abbie]

interesting poem... I like it! nice job Hanna! keep writing! :D

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

im glad ypu appreciated it! i showed this in english last year and noone could understand it!! i mean come on its not "that" confusing

[Abbie]

no, It really isn't. :D

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

and this was an honors sophmore class if you can believe it! I was shocked at their "inteligence" lol

[♥ Kinnixk]

lol

[Abbie]

Haha! Lol! :P