What happens when you play god?

poem bout a cherub who cuz she's bored begins 2 toy with ppl's lives She treats them like toys an goes on about the effect of her actions an how something once pure cud go so wrong an evil

On a whim, floats a cloud

With a winged Babe aloft

 

Every good, and every bad

Is laughed at

And written on a writing pad

 

The dollies start to break

And a winged child grows bored

 

Another soul has fallen

And soon Babe has an ocean

 

 

Babe is still bored, and smirks

As she floats on her toy she has wrought

 

She plays with her toys, and the cries increase
Babe soon gets angry; they call her cruel, a beast

Little winged Babe, sinks to the ground
She stomps her feet

 

Pound!Pound!

Pound!Pound!

 

Her oceans now vast, the cries feed its yearn
And now it grows violent

 

The world is shown Babe's scorn

She floats, and she glares; she sinks even lower
As her broken toys turn on her, she runs for cover

 

A cherub once born, now feared as the devil
Baby blue eye's now angry, turn yellow

 

Babe will sink deeper and scream
And her toys will still cry

And call her real mean

 

And still she grows cold, Frozen

In the flames she still lies

 

Her wings disintegrated, while her halo fries

 

She doesn't scream

But her toys

They will die

 

Then she'll play puppets

While she sinks

Where she lies

 

 

© 2012 Emily Dickinson Jr.  All rights reserved

Reviews

[LOfCharlemagne]

Very intresting. It so so diverse from most poems and has a very abstract feel to it. I like that. Like the majority of your poems I have read, it is very well done and enjoyable. However, i do suggest explaining what is going on a little better, as the reader does get somewhat confused from time to time in this. It is a great poem, just could use a little more explination!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I usually dnt offer much explanation cuz i like pply to come to their own conclusion after analysis but maybe your right some people don't like that

[LOfCharlemagne]

Dont get me wrong, it is good...just feels kind of confusing and unorganized at spots. Didn't make me love it any less though :)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Which parts were confusing???

[LOfCharlemagne]

In the start you are speaking about a cloud with a baby, and then it switches to dollies. Thats a real change up. Then things go haywire and it appears to be because babe is bored. Then I assume everybody thinks she is mean because she ate people. Thats just how it appears to me.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Babe is a cherub an angel on a cloud . she gets bored and starts toying with humans on earth and they became her "dollies" and its all about how that goes wrong and turns an angel once pure into something wrong and evil , does it make more sense when you read it like that???

[LOfCharlemagne]

Yes, that makes much more sense! Thank you :)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

lol thanx! anything else confuse you now that you got the main idea of the poem?

[LOfCharlemagne]

Not really, I understand now. Its really a good poem! If you get a chance, you should read my poem. You might like it. If your into superheros, you should also check out my story "A letter to Charlemagne"! :)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

sure! sounds kool I'v always like the name charlemagne :-) remingds me of my historical fiction books alot for some reason lol

[LOfCharlemagne]

Because Charlemagne(the historical figure) was a turkish king around 900 AD. I always thought it sounded like a superhero, so i made him one :D

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Oh! so that's y he sounded familiar! lol

[~VertoAtrum~]

This is so interesting. Pardon me saying this, but I have no idea what this is even about.....BUT I love it to bits! It's so different, and sometimes not knowing what you're reading is just fine, it adds to the fun ;)

[S]

Very well written....I like it alot.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Thanx sayra I'm glad you you liked it. It's one of my favorite poems of mine.

[Joey Johnson]

I enjoyed this, nicely done.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Thank you! It's a personal favorite of mine

[Deron Alexis]

really good metaphor the whole thing gave over a feeling of human tendency and pitfalls we can't hide from those so why not write about them and do it awesomely while we're at it well written

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

thanx so much :-) a lot of ppl hv a lot of trouble understanding it

[Deron Alexis]

i think i get it XD the actions and creations of human kind turning against us right?

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Pretty much though in the poem it was literally about a cherub who had to much pwr

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

ThE pwr corrupted her and turned her into the devil

[Deron Alexis]

oh cool makes sense though i would say that the devil's wrong desires had more of a part to play in what he became in his case it could have happened to anyone but this was a great application to how people say power corrupts

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

That is basically the moral of the poem

[JB Murray]

Pretty solid write. This has origins of meaning, and be taken in so many ways, regardless of your initial intention. Thanks for sharing!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

ilike my poems to hv multiple meaings so im glad you saw that in it. thanks for reading :-)

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed this poem. You create a world with sadness and description. I like the main character and how you led the reader into a sad tale. I like the ending a lot. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

welcome to my world lol but rly thank you im glad you liked it

[Levi Levin]

Great write, sad, but yet a realit in many lives indeed.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I try to center on reality in a lot of my poems. its sad but its true and its real.

[Rob Santana]

This a very creative piece. Truly something different. How simple it is for even angels to turn away from the light. I really like this piece, well done. Hey how did you get your work copyrighted? I would like to do that to my work.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

I'm glad you liked it, Thanx :-)