I like the concept of counting from one to three. However, I do not understand why you named it forsaken departure. It actually seemed to me like the girl(or at least I assumed she was a girl), was already giving up on the guy. She seemed to have forgiven him and was meaning to forget him at the count of three. Only I don't get why it's a forsaken departure. To me it's more like a departure from the past, but I guess there's something in your poem that I must have missed. Anyway, over all, your piece is still a worthwhile read. The counting kinda gave me the feeling of having a count down until the limit. Once the count has reached three, everything ends there, all the pain, the heartache, everything; it simply means that the limit has been set and reached. Three signifies goodbye although it's a painful decision. Sometimes we let go because we have to, not because we would be happy to. Well, I guess that's how I understood it. Good Poem. Expressive and a bit angst.
I like the concept of counting from one to three. However, I do not understand why you named it forsaken departure. It actually seemed to me like the girl(or at least I assumed she was a girl), was already giving up on the guy. She seemed to have forgiven him and was meaning to forget him at the count of three. Only I don't get why it's a forsaken departure. To me it's more like a departure from the past, but I guess there's something in your poem that I must have missed. Anyway, over all, your piece is still a worthwhile read. The counting kinda gave me the feeling of having a count down until the limit. Once the count has reached three, everything ends there, all the pain, the heartache, everything; it simply means that the limit has been set and reached. Three signifies goodbye although it's a painful decision. Sometimes we let go because we have to, not because we would be happy to. Well, I guess that's how I understood it. Good Poem. Expressive and a bit angst.
I no longer have a computer available unless i sneak onto my sisters when she's away. :) Dispicable me. I can only write decent poetry when i'm in a state of depression. but throughout the day i'll th.. more..