Murky Puddles

insecurities destroy us from the inside

Murky Puddles

she looks down in the murky water
she sees imperfection, i see someone's beautiful daughter

I ask society how this could be 
why does she feel like a rain drop in a sea

a shallow sea of competition and pride
we're all walking at the same pace, but shes not in stride

so unappreciated that she thinks shes unworthy
strong and beautiful she intimidates all, even me.

no one listens to her, she wipes away the rain
eyes leaking because her insecurities induce pain

It rains and her muddy puddle becomes clear
she can finally see herself here

she has overcome her self-doubt
then she hears inaudible whispers and begins to pout

her puddle becomes dirty, again.

Author's Note

look for positives (especially in yourself)

Reviews

[Saaim]

that's a beautiful poem I love it.

[darkabyss]

thats great bro if everyone could just get over the pressures of society to be so damn perfect5 ppl wouldnt hate themselves so much and we'd have less suicide and school shoots you know where im coming frombro really like this one !!!

[joshua deathdealer]

This is perfect. Well done.

[onyoche]

i find myself in love with the truth in these words..its easy to lose the right look with ourselves because of the elements around us.

[Neon]

Yes .. me too always convey the message that just try finding some postivity ... think positive always .. in this bad world . negativity'll destroy you. I love this writing. What a great description here with the powerful theme. It's a great msg you conveyed about positive rights. Beautiful work. Lovely thoughts.

[Lindsey]

I love this poem. Right when you think she is becoming more confident, she falls again. i love the line 'no one listens to her, she wipes away the rain Eyes leaking because her insecurities induce pain' Beautiful words!

[Sami Khalil]

"she has overcome her self-doubt
then she hears inaudible whispers and begins to pout"

[Dakshta]

I really liked this.. great write!

[Emily B]

thank goodness for the grace of poetry :)

beautiful poem

[Scott Mou]

A beautiful poem that shows the need for self-confidence well. Simply great.