Murky Puddles

insecurities destroy us from the inside

Murky Puddles

she looks down in the murky water
she sees imperfection, i see someone's beautiful daughter

I ask society how this could be 
why does she feel like a rain drop in a sea

a shallow sea of competition and pride
we're all walking at the same pace, but shes not in stride

so unappreciated that she thinks shes unworthy
strong and beautiful she intimidates all, even me.

no one listens to her, she wipes away the rain
eyes leaking because her insecurities induce pain

It rains and her muddy puddle becomes clear
she can finally see herself here

she has overcome her self-doubt
then she hears inaudible whispers and begins to pout

her puddle becomes dirty, again.

Author's Note

look for positives (especially in yourself)

Reviews

[Correspondence]

This is very powerful. Straight to my library this goes! :)

[katnisscat]

This is really good. Bravo!

[Ezekiel Silver]

A remarkable poem that readers can easily connect to. It does seem like it possesses too much metaphorical imagery and not enough imagery to fit the emotion of the piece though. Still, an excellent one all the same.

[Ezekiel Silver]

A remarkable poem that readers can easily connect to. It does seem like it possesses too much metaphorical imagery and not enough imagery to fit the emotion of the piece though. Still, an excellent one all the same.

[Quiet Child]

this is a great write, a real contender!

[minisla]

really subtle poem well done

[Frieda P]

An awe inspiring read, I think it should be required reading for teenage girls!

[Emerald Seas]

Stunningly beautiful poem. Word choice is perfectly executed. I really enjoyed this read.

[emma]

i absolutely love the wording you've used here. really beautiful poem.

[FayeLove]

Your poetry is truly beautiful god bless you this poem has inspired my poems. Thank you!