Young hopeful.

Young hopeful.

A Poem by Poeticpiers
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Sonnet in tetrameter

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Young hopeful

 

I brushed my teeth and combed my hair

I hoped to charm a lady fair.

She never even noticed me.
Perhaps she didn’t want to see

My older brother laughed at me.

He said I was too young to be.

Making eyes at older girls

 with bright blue eyes and golden curls

He said she was too old for me.

But I suspect that secretly

He is afraid that I might be

 flirting more successfully

That he can do at twenty two.

A touch of green eyed jealousy.

 

Friday, 25 March 2011

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© 2011 Poeticpiers


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Brothers are constantly interferring.. mine drives me crazy so i can totally agree with this. Beautiful penned out flows wonderfully and it plays before your eyes like a black and white cinema, wonderful!

Posted 13 Years Ago


The words flow like a gentle stream with this impeccable meter. This was a delight to read for so many reasons.

Posted 13 Years Ago


haha, lovely - I usually don't like old-fashioned metre/ form, but this is wonderful. Good old sibling rivalry, and naive teenage crushes. You've done a brilliant job here :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Infatuation of the young man, a part of growing up. Well expressed my friend.

Posted 13 Years Ago


rutting season ~ nicely done

Posted 13 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Poeticpiers
Poeticpiers

Near Durham city UK, United Kingdom



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72years, young married. Ex police officer Ex social worker. interests Reading and writing poetry Painting and drawing in coloured pencil avid reader,sci fi fantasy crime. comparitive religion and esp... more..

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