defeated

sonnet

 

 

Defeated

 

The sea fret caught me by surprise.

It sneaked in very stealthily.

So dense I had to strain my eyes

to see what little I could see.

Distorting the reality

 increasing and decreasing size

 of things familiar to me

Although my memory supplies

all that I need to know

 to find my way home from the shore.

No point in staying so I go

 back to my empty home once more.

Because the sea fret frightens me.

It can curtail my liberty.

 

16-Sep-08

 

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Reviews

[JadedSparrow]

I picked this sonnet to read and Im glad that I did. I love the flow of your work. It seems almost effortless. You definately have a way with words...

JS

[John]

impressive. I very much enjoyed reading this very in dept piece.

[Lyrical Love]

I enjoyed this fine sonnet.
Great write for my library.
This is my first of your work.
Reading the comments below it looks like I am
in for a treat in reading more.

[Rain]

This is a fine piece of writing. I'm not sure if you meant this literally, but this piece portrays the awesome power of the sea. Personally, I love the sea, but am quite afraid to be too far away from the shore. It also has a meloncholy feel, which are reflected in the lines. Even an empty home, although somewhat sad, still is home, and is safe in it's familarity. Great write, as usual. Rain..

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Well done! I always know I will not be disappointed reading your poetry.

Sal