Airborne

sonnet

 

 

 

Airborne

 

Always airborne an Albatross

can easily vast oceans cross

They eat and sleep upon the wing

and rarely land for anything.

But even Albatrosses mate

 although more often isolate.

They come together as a pair.

You cannot raise chicks in the air.

 But once the young have learnt to fly.

Received the freedom of the sky.

They the resume the seperate

life style they appreciate.

An Albatross prefers to be

left alone completely free.

 

18-Apr-08

Reviews

[EvesDaughter]

the things you learn.... ;)
Very smooth flow and
an interesting topic, too.
I enjoyed this poem very
much.

[Rockebah]

As a poem this is good: in terms of choice of words and concept. However as a sonnet poem it is not really there. Sonnets are complex poem and i feel like it was not done justice. The syllable count is a little to short to be a sonnet. It should be 10 syllable count for each line not 8 and 7. The syllables should even follow a certain rhythum, like a song (review shakespearian sonnets). Hope the critique isn't too hard i'm merely trying to help you improve your poetry.

A very poetic documentary on the albatross.

Good choice of words, good rhythm, and good flow.

This is a good piece