Easy prey

narrative verse

 

 

 

Easy Prey

 

 

A demon lurks beneath his skin.

Although he looks so innocent.

His purpose is malevolent

 to foster sin his sole intent.

 

Though he may wear a saintly air.

His rosy cheeks and twinkling eyes

his inner wickedness belies

His skill is telling artful lies.

 

He takes us in so easily

because we do not want to see.

It fills him with unholy glee.

To fool us with smooth sophistry.

 

Do as you wish, do as you will.

There is no God to punish you

and we accept his words as true

but only because we want to.

 

He is the father of all lies

and weaves his web of words so well

Encouraging us to rebel

against the rules we know so well

 

His words appear to set us free

 from any fear of punishment

Indulge your sin do not repent.

Pursue a life on pleasure bent.

 

He leads the innocent astray.

His well pretended piety

conceals his veniality

 and we respond obediently.

 

We sin because we want to sin

It is our choice to break the rules

Although we can pretend he fools

 us into becoming his tools.

 

We know there is a price to pay.

A demon lurks beneath his skin

and we as fools invite him in.

We think to blame him for our sin.

 

There has to come a quarter day

 when all he debts we owe fall due

 and we are sadly left to rue

 the things we did we shouldn’t do.

 

6-Feb-08

Reviews

[thecoolone52]

i liked it.. theres a little devil in all of us i guess and thats kind of what i took from this poem... very nice job and enjoyable rhyme sceme!!

[Kristen Darian Marie Wi..]

This really has a good rhythm to it, although rhyming poetry isn't popular anymore, I always enjoy it. I'm not entirely clear by the end who the subject of the poem is, is it the wicked? is it THE devil? is it a demon-like figure? I'm not really clear who "he" is, did I miss something? The last thing I might have done differently would be the wording in the third to last stanza, it trips up your beautiful rhythm just a touch. Overall I would say I liked it though.

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"There has to come a quarter day
when all the debts we owe fall due
and we are sadly left to rue
the things we did we shouldn't do." I like this piece very much. It is so well written and formed as always by you, but the words have real passion and clarity, something a bit extra I think, the 7th verse really stands out.