Piece Of Heaven

For a woman I once knew...

 Piece of heaven

Let me message your feet until you forget they  were

meant for walking...

Your shoulders, back, and waist  until you feel as

though you've left the body.

Beneath the purest form of relaxation this is your

day,

I'll sit beside the tub while you soak and read a

story.

Watch as your eyes get heavy I am filled with joy

because my favorite past time is admiring you while

asleep,

 I nominate It for the world's eighth wonder the

melody I hear made by the stars  that twinkle when you

breathe,

your skin is so radiant the moon says to the night sky

what about me?

I just wish I was there when God said let there be

light and it was...

Let there be a startling gorgeous

creature without peer and here you are.

My piece of heaven. 

© 2006 Marvin Lewis Jr.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[J.Black]

Kinda speechless.... knocked me off my feet, but I'll stand back up and preach now what I felt.
Whom ever this woman may be, she seems like such a Goddess to you, it's nearly heart warming because you would do anything to slave to her needs and wants. - Mmmm what a true man he is!

"I just wish I was there when God said let there be
light and it was...
Let there be a startling gorgeous
creature without peer and here you are.
My piece of heaven. "

Those lines stood out the most to me. It's nice when you feel so close to someone, that they simply are your angel and you would kill yourself just so you can be where she is, in this heaven she creates for you. This is so romantic, my god you have a sensational way with your words if I must admit. This is what ever woman would wish for in a man, and I bet you'll make the dream husband when the time comes my friend.

[bluessadmood]

oh lucky woman to have such love ,he will give her massage ,read her a story just to see her go to sleep and watch her ,his favorite past ,what love ,this is so great,can love be really pure and unlimited,this so great

[Kia]

This is inspiring...It shows that men are not all "dogs" and do think in a romantic admiring way about the women they love or care for. I was instantly relaxed in reading this, and know one day that I will receive this treatment! Good job!

[KAREN BROWN]

This is a beautiful romantic poem.this really hits my heart not to many men i've meant ever expressed how you just did.It makes me feel like crying so wonderful to read and the way you put it is overwelming .she was very lucky to have you in her life.thank you so much for sharing this with me i shows me there are wonderful men like you who truely have feelings and understand. I loved it!!!!!karen

[Dani California]

Ah, to be adored like that .... melts my heart.
This is truly lovely.. :)

[A LaDy NaMeD D]

This is too beautiful i love it, i wish all guys felt this way about their wives, and girlfriends.

Danni J

[AlleyCat34]

Le Sigh........
I have to say Marvin I think you read my mind and created my prince charming. Great piece!

[TP LaRose]

Oh my......that was so sweet and beautiful.
I love the line about the moon saying to the night sky....what about me?

Very romantic and I can only dream that a man will think those things about myself.....as I'm sure all women hope for and dream of.
Well written....keep them coming.

[Nely Amorim]

a very beautiful ode to your ladylove, I admire your use of words to describe such feelings of love. you're a wonderful romantic writer. :)

[Haley Smith]

wow i love this! it's very romantic and beautifully written and sad in a way, because of your description: "For a woman I once knew.."

keep writing. i loooooove this.

[Lyrical Love]

Awesome!! You had me with the feet...LOL!
Continue to write...you are a natural. So heart felt...watching someone sleep-I can envision this whole scene...great imagery!!!