A Footprint In Water

 A footprint in water

 

I’m lost...

Stranded somewhere between death and laughter,

above suspicion but blood is cradled in my palms.

Maybe I am a killer or are these tears coming from my

hands?

I am a wick without a candle a hopeless man or a

beach devoid of sand a star as if there were no black

sky, a face with a mind that hates the mirror.

Dreams fade into the unknown as sunsets and like eyes

wiped after tears nightmares only get clearer,

are any prayers answered for the beginner?

I wish GOD would just cry on me because the sky is on

fire, 

the ground I walk on is as stable as the ocean so I

drown in a sidewalk, 

while flames engulf my mind it isn’t fair because at

the time it was handcuffed.

I’m lonely...

I want to jump from a skyscraper to touch a dream before

I leap into what looks like opened arms,

sadness has turned me into a child that’s afraid of

the dark who’s only prayer is “hold me GOD”,

my eyes only taste sour obscurity show me love. 

Feed me trust for my soul is scared with an empty

stomach I run with stars read my notebooks and you’ll

understand what I’ve become...

I didn’t know being stranded could be so lucrative,

  still I wish I knew who I was.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[C.R. Moore "Lasla"]

I am a wick without a candle a hopeless man or a
beach devoid of sand a star as if there were no black
sky, a face with a mind that hates the mirror.

These are most excellent lines with such emotion displayed.
I also liked the message of hope here also and choices within ourselves.
I was entranced as I read through here thinking back over a lot if emotions I have felt on this journey!

Lasla

[Lindsey:)]

wow.this was very well written!
i can see it in my head.

I want to jump from a skyscraper to touch a dream before
I leap into what looks like opened arms,

i liked that line the best. you really have a gift!
Good Job!

[Donald Meikle]

consider this for an instant. Water has surface tension. Tear drops are shaped by falling because of it.
So for a very brief amount of time (key word very) a foot actually steps onto the water's surface. It will not stretch enough to leave a print but will stretch enough before breaking to leave an impression. To those of us concerned with time (The only thing we all get a given amount of) For me this would be a size 6EEEEE and sinking

[QuietPoet]

wow, I like it. Very nicely written. You have such talent and you make the person reading your work imagine it like it is real.

[WordMaster]

The title you selected is magical; as is the poem

The structure and tempo of the read held me until the end

The last line completes this masterful work in just the right way

An impressive work of art

[Dizzy-Izzy]

Hi Marvin, I don't know if I can write a description for you but, I have some thoughts about your beautiful poem.

Footprints, the markings of the path we tread. In water there is no trace of them, no one can find us, we can't see where we have been, and uncertainty plagues the next steps we take... ... ... (thinkin)... can we g-e-t m-o-r-e lost?

The space between death and laughter, the rote paths we walk each day, not thinking really just plugging along. The laughter seems infrequent as the days turn into weeks and then years.

Blood and tears, the flow of life and emotion... ... see it slip through our fingers... ... ...

A wick without a candle... the wick is what gives light, yes? The wax just melts away... ... ...

"What is to give light must endure burning."- Viktor Frankl

"the ground I walk on is as stable as the ocean so I
drown in a sidewalk,"

Love that line, love the ocean. The ocean is not just a salt water pool, it is alive and unpredictable, sometimes it's gentle and easy, sometimes wild and out of control, lashing out like ... ... ... an angry (insert noun here, woman, child, ???)

"while flames engulf my mind it isn't fair because at
the time it was handcuffed."

Happens to me all the time and then I remember I have the key... damn!

"If you hear the song I sing,
You must understand
You hold the key to love and fear
All in your trembling hand
Just one key unlocks them both
It's there at your command" ... Get Together- by The Youngbloods
(Kristina is a hippie... a really old one... shhh, don't tell)


"Feed me trust for my soul is scared with an empty
stomach I run with stars read my notebooks and you'll
understand what I've become..."

Empty stomach or, hungry soul? One is easily satiated, the other not so much... ... ... but I suppose it's all about the journey right?

The Road Not Taken
by Robert Frost...

Two roads diverged in a yellow wood,
And sorry I could not travel both
And be one traveller, long I stood
And looked down one as far as I could
To where it bent in the undergrowth;

Then took the other, as just as fair,
And having perhaps the better claim,
Because it was grassy and wanted wear;
Though as for that the passing there
Had worn them really about the same,

And both that morning equally lay
In leaves no step had trodden black.
Oh, I kept the first for another day!
Yet knowing how way leads on to way,
I doubted if I should ever come back.

I shall be telling this with a sigh
Somewhere ages and ages hence:
Two roads diverged in a wood, and I--
I took the one less traveled by,
And that has made all the difference

"still I wish I knew who I was." Hmmm, me too.

I have taken a lot of liberties with my comment, I hope it's okay, looking over it, it's a bit long. I get like that sometimes. I have read a few of your poems and you are very talented. You have brought joy to my life today, I need all of that I can get. Thanks

Kristina

[Li Li]

I want to jump from a skyscraper to touch a dream before
I leap into what looks like opened arms

I really liked this piece. You have a great way of bringing metaphors to a light.... all in a way one can feel and understand. A wick without a candle.... I would suppose it would burn faster this way....

I enjoy reading your words here.... I think some of the bars are a little mingled... but that's so easy to overlook and forgive when you grasp what you are saying.

Wonderful....
~Li Li