A Footprint In Water

 A footprint in water

 

I’m lost...

Stranded somewhere between death and laughter,

above suspicion but blood is cradled in my palms.

Maybe I am a killer or are these tears coming from my

hands?

I am a wick without a candle a hopeless man or a

beach devoid of sand a star as if there were no black

sky, a face with a mind that hates the mirror.

Dreams fade into the unknown as sunsets and like eyes

wiped after tears nightmares only get clearer,

are any prayers answered for the beginner?

I wish GOD would just cry on me because the sky is on

fire, 

the ground I walk on is as stable as the ocean so I

drown in a sidewalk, 

while flames engulf my mind it isn’t fair because at

the time it was handcuffed.

I’m lonely...

I want to jump from a skyscraper to touch a dream before

I leap into what looks like opened arms,

sadness has turned me into a child that’s afraid of

the dark who’s only prayer is “hold me GOD”,

my eyes only taste sour obscurity show me love. 

Feed me trust for my soul is scared with an empty

stomach I run with stars read my notebooks and you’ll

understand what I’ve become...

I didn’t know being stranded could be so lucrative,

  still I wish I knew who I was.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[C.R. Moore "Lasla"]

I am a wick without a candle a hopeless man or a
beach devoid of sand a star as if there were no black
sky, a face with a mind that hates the mirror.

These are most excellent lines with such emotion displayed.
I also liked the message of hope here also and choices within ourselves.
I was entranced as I read through here thinking back over a lot if emotions I have felt on this journey!

Lasla

[Dionysus Cain]

awesome, there are alot of pieces i like in this poem, this took me on a vivid journey through your mind . i have to tell you this is very good...

the ground I walk on is as stable as the ocean so I

drown in a sidewalk,

this righ there is so real to me, i understand this oh so well, standing ovation, very good ..... very good.....

[Walkingblind]

wow I love this poem and your comparisons on:

'I am a wick without a candle a hopeless man or a
beach devoid of sand a star as if there were no black
sky, a face with a mind that hates the mirror.'

I can see the struggle between having something vital
but having it mean nothing without its partner.
My favorite line would have to be:

I wish GOD would just cry on me because the sky is on fire,

I'm lovin this.

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

I didn't know being stranded could be so lucrative,
still I wish I knew who I was......

I feel this is one of the strongest lines in the poem, bec yes, sometimes out of our pain and misery come the best poetry. i know being with my ex was so painful, but helped me write some of the strongest poetry i have ever written, and who knows? maybe i will make money someday, it may be lucrative>??? and sometimes through our writing we know who we are, sometimes we don't. still i wish i knew who i was..............

I wish GOD would just cry on me because the sky is on

fire,

the ground I walk on is as stable as the ocean so I

drown in a sidewalk,

while flames engulf my mind it isn't fair because at

the time it was handcuffed.

Amazing. Man, you are one of my favorite writers here on the site. And there are so many good ones too. Good luck with your book!!!

[THE LOST ROSE]

Marvin, I running out of words to describe my feelings towards your writing. When you make other poets want to stop what they are doing at that moment and grab a pen and a pad I don't know of a greater compliment. Thanks! I have to go write right now!

[Lyrical Love]

She is right!
Who are you...?
I am so hooked on your writings. Whatever you touch-I am sure will change the world.
Thanks for the God's eye view of life...
Powerful words in song!!!

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

I am a wick without a candle a hopeless man or a
beach devoid of sand a star as if there were no black
sky, a face with a mind that hates the mirror.

great lines.

This is a great piece of writing, expressive and unique words. You got the reader (me) thinking and wondering, who are you and will you ever learn the answer.

excellent write.

[Dalaina Renee]

Very well written!

[Spat Queen]

the imagery is genius.

[~ Luna Moth ~]

I really love this piece. It is very artful, intricate and intriguing. You painted pictures with your words, and took the reader on a journey into your soul. Thank you for allowing us passage through this marvelous place.

On another note...I think you could have a little more impact, lyrically, if you insert pauses and spaces, like:

I am a wick without a candle
a hopeless man
or a beach devoid of sand
a star as if there were no black sky
a face with a mind that hates the mirror

All-in-all, a great write.
Thanks, again, for sharing.
;-D