Firestorm

Firestorm

 

Firebrand full of

Malcontent

Pound fists

To the onyx

Sky

 

Chanting with vulgar

Veracity

A firestorm lighting the

Night

 

Destructive notations burn

Bright

Sizzling the cool

Air

 

We shall never cower

We must stand to

Fight

 

Sparks shower

Below

As an inferno

Rages

 

Government trying to

Control

As protests become

Courageous

 

An intense firestorm

Blazes

For freelance freedom

Is at stake  

Reviews

[Ian Faraway]

I'm not disrespecting this poem because I love it but from all the writings I've read over the past twelve hours, "onyx sky" seems to be an overused phrase, though descriptive. Other than that, I loved this poem. Powerful with its foresight of the future coming to past with the government, wising of people who've had enough. J'adore! -Ian

[Poetic Beauty]

you will find I have certain words and phrases that I like to use. I favor certain words. I do understand the over use of that phrase and who knows maybe some day I will change it up a bit. I am glad you liked the meaning in this piece.

[Coyote Poetry]

"Government trying to
Control
As protests become
Courageous "
We best stand for freedom and less government before it is too late!'! I like the feel and the desire of this outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Lily Mae]

Very powerful..a definite firestorm of thought and it's passions..xo

[Sethnicity]

It's like a war rally! and some of the themes made me think of Avatar (airbender)
Allmax is correct the use of strong/ aggressive language serves this piece well. Less is definitely more here because the language is so strong... Not Vulgar by any means but Strong!
Favorite line:
Sparks shower
Below
As an inferno
Rages



Government trying to
Control
As protests become
Courageous

[Allmax]

Of malcontent, fist onyx.
Sky vulgar veracity.
The night burn bright.
Cool air cover to fight.
Shower below inferno rages.
To control become courageous.
Firestorm blazes freedom stake.

These are the last word of every line in you poem that Made this simple powerful poem. Awesome write, thank you for sahring... Allmax