Lights Out

Out of the darkness

A banshee does cry

Give me my life

Or ye shall die

 

Hair as black

As raven feathers

Illuminated

With an unearthly

Blue

The forest is quiet

Not a sound can be heard

Except this creatures

Demanding words

 

Give me my life

Or ye shall die

 

Breath caught in

Frozen lungs

Body trembling

Has begun

 

With steely ice blue

Eyes

She searches my soul

Contemplating my demise

 

Vaporous finger

Taps me on the nose

Neuropathy sets in

I am numb to my toes.

 

Vision is fading

World spinning

Way to fast

I fall to the ground

Hitting my head

With a crash

 

Lights out…

Reviews

[Hayley]

This has a Salem Witch Trial feel to it; I love it! Your use of "ye" is very effective with the descriptions of the raven feathers as well. I particularly liked: "Vaporous finger
Taps me on the nose
Neuropathy sets in
I am numb to my toes."

Descriptive word choice only adds to the quality! Nice work!

[Aidz]

Had a lilt to it , a definite rhythm .... enjoyed :)

[The Analog Kid]

This tells a story like Coyote says below. This packs a strong punch and has vivid imagery. Nice to see you trying diverse styles:)

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoyed this tale in the poem. I could feel the fear. I like the thoughts and how you ended the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Michael X]

I love the way you bring the words to flowing passion, it draws me in to the flow and keeps my attention with a sense of desire and art mixed into the moment. this poem captures the sense of eerie vapor that captures imagination. Awesome.