Walls

something that simply came to mind.

As the walls crumple

And ruin lay at your feet

there is no one to blame

but the person staring in the mirror

feeling tried and meek

Words spoken

in a realm 

not quite here

have all but died

and disappeared

When silence is broken

and emotions come to light

all that is wished for

is the cloak of night

The castle

guards have fallen

asleep on the job

leaves a once

imperturbable force

with an opening 

for decimation

as the general forges on

The knights

lost their courage

to keep the heart

safe

as words were spoken

that should have never been shown

for vulnerable is the heart that stands alone.

 

Reviews

[Priscilla Sayers]

I love the depth of this piece. it speaks to me as a person who knows the feeling all too well. Your writing exquisite in this piece and you vulnerable heart is stronger for the courage you have to expose it. May the Knight once again protect the poetic beauty who speaks to the soul.

[Coyote Poetry]

A unprotected heart can be broke. I like the use of guards and knights to make your point in this poem. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Emily Rae]

i can feel a raw sense of vulnerability and loneliness in this piece

[emmajoy]

A poem that tells a story born in the past but stretches into the now. Tis more than easy to feel alone, to realise how vunerable one is, how deeply one can be hurt. Your poem, your cleverly expressed poem, near weeps the fact that things have happened, words been said that have scarred you lonely. That 'cloak of the night', that essential self-preservation sadly goes missing for many of us. This is very fine writing, has heart, sincerity.

[Aidz]

I liked the write felt soothing, however it felt like two writes with the last two stanzas a write of their own

[Arabdha]

"for vulnerable is the heart that stands alone"...this one leaves you so out in the open..so unprotected and vulnerable! You have realized the feeling well and portrayed beautifully ! :)

[Kim's Poems]

Wow love teh way you write, I can feel emotion entangle in this.
Love the powerfulness I felt. Awesome writing skills here.

[Shalini Dinesh]

The last three lines were just awesome, and my fav, poem is so power packed...

[Tina Kline]

We never know when we're going to leave ourselves open for something we don't want. This is an amazing poem!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

The castle can be lonely when you don't share the beauty inside.