Medusa's Chattel

a little mythological a bit dark

Enslaved vocabulary has astounding actions

Syllables slung in the faces with acidic actions

Penetrating the lungs with destructive miasmic fumes

Boating allegiance to Medusa's bewitching charms

Capitulation screaming with toxic admission

Docile demeanor proudly spoken with cocky vigor

Tongue recites a dedication to bondage with bravado

Proudly parading combustion of total ensnarement 

Loathing those who would chastise conceited vocalization

Chattel's silken binds neglected with utter dispassion

As exuberance echoes across the abundant land

While Medusa slumbers contently without acknowledgement

Leaving the tattered silk to neglectfully unravel

A mirage of submission dries the vibrant oasis

Calling to the harbinger of destruction on the pale stallion

Shadowed phantasm becomes translucently clear

As the impertinent serpent slithers to another's embrace

 

Reviews

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Enslaved vocabulary has astounding actions. Docile demeanor proudly spoken with cocky vigor while Medusa slumbers contently without acknowledgement. Syllables are slung in the faces with acidic actions I am thinking that this well penned piece is about the power of words..............well written!

[x]

interesting... I certainly like the idea. It reminds me of that line about "beauty is that Medusa's head which men go armed to sever, and dead will starve and sing forever" though I can't remember where it's from.. i probably read it on Wikipedia *bites lip* :)

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

You always use your words wisely and in a strong powerful matter, this is a great piece of work!

[Robin]

their is some strong symbolism here those snakes , those serpents wriggle for freedom.

and that mirage of submission , the self opening eyes , finding an escape - free .

romantic love is a strange taskmaster and are we ever free from its dominance and the words it is tangled in ?

[LadyCardiac]

I never knew words could have so much power. You start of this piece strong and it never weakens. Excellent piece.

[MuSe Ampoule]

You strike a spark with this wonderful mythical piece! So full of yummy vocab...greatness. I love this in a way of is it submission when they become dispassionate or is it just giving up. Lots of under tones here that lend to it being such a strong piece. wonderful!
"Proudly parading combustion of total ensnarement
Loathing those who would chastise conceited vocalization
Chattel's silken binds neglected with utter dispassion"

[Thea]

Very striking poem! Well structured... :)

[Jeremy Baker]

Good use of the words, and a great tribute to the significance of words in general! Well crafted and executed!

[Tasha]

So much power in this write. Great job.
♥ Ta'Shandra

[blakjassy]

I really enjoyed reading this! I read it through a couple of times and then read it aloud to get a real feeling for it... it was like sampling fine wine!

[Tommy]

Medusa's charming chattel, just take it in from a reflection of faith, because those looks are stone cold... Ovid tells of a beauty punished for her looks, not once but twice... Raped by a god and transformed by a jealous goddess whose hiss turned hair to snakes and beauty to a bitter and hard stare...

I enjoyed the well executed word play in this...

Great Write!
RLG,
Tommy