Breakfast with Sam OT

this was done in simple fun for Crowley Breakfast with OT. Loosely based off Dr. Seuss book Green Eggs and ham

I do not know what are green eggs and ham

Said Sam OT that is who I am

I have not seen them on a train

Nor have I seem them on a plane

I have not tasted them on my tongue

Their color makes me want to run

They look like mildewed eggs

Causing shakes to begin in my legs

Can i please have toast with tea

Was his simple inquiring plea

We do not serve plain toast

Only with green eggs, was her boast

We don't serve tea unless with ham

Now eat your dish or scram.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A nice re-write on a old story. I like how you told the tale. The movement of words made the poem fun to read. Never eat anything that is green that is a food. Except for a few vegetables. A very good ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

[The Perfectionist]

It's a cute idea, but one thing that Seuss had that you don't is rhythm. The syllables in this are just all wrong. Almost all of your pairings aren't even close to what they have to be. You need that rhythm to read this through and to keep it light and funny. The words are amusing, but sacrificing structure for rhyme just shoots yourself in the foot.

[Marie Harrison]

Ha! Very cute. Loved your version!

[Chris]

your way or the high/low/road-way... control, I'm right and you're - everyone else... chuckling here.

[Desert Dreamer]

Great fun! Love visualizing food that makes someone want to run away. Dr Seuss is my favorite, it is rare that anyone can rhyme so well, but you have done it today.

[Dream Weaver]

Dr. Zuess Rulz and so does this :))

[roarke]

lol, green ink.... just eat the dang eggs... hahaha
Jaunty, Suess is lookin' for his spatula and fork....
fun stuff.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

a wonderful rewrite of one of my favorite stories.....excellent!

[Raven Starhawk]

This is a profound work that deserves much more attention than this. You have composed such strong and fantastic words that slant toward truth and really how I feel.

[Crowley]

A great tribute to the late great doctor and the in your face here and now OT. He would order plain toast...all his creativity goes into his writing leaving no room for an awesome breakfast. I'll even bet he's supermodel thin. Great write, loved the humor and lightheartedness.

[Larry Dyson]

hmm needs another syllabble or two..."Now eat your dish or oshkabibble ...scram."

hehe