Fairy Tale's Death

The soul is submerged in teardrops

Drowning in broken shards of jagged glass

That leaves crimson stains, an impasse

The castle has fallen from the sky

With ruin, the scratched heart does comply

 

The fortress walls have been damaged

Destroyed with verbal rejection

Guards slain leaving no ample protection

Defenses secretly have been invaded

A connection slowly evaded

 

Barricades block the only path

The general surrenders to defeat

Solidifying the liquid concrete

The damaged heart beseeching peace

Impending malice starts to increase

 

Fairytale end in a hurt and deceit

The love laying in a green pool of slime

As Death’s toll begins to silently chime

Sounding its infinite tragic end

While the heart rises to transcend

Reviews

[Linear]

And so this tragic tale ends, à lovers kiss was amiss so broken hearted she at last departed

Great work

[roy mccarthy]

i love this!
it flows perfectly,
when everything falls apart we must start again from scratch!

[Time.]

I have very little to say about this piece,
other then the fact that I love it..
Its uncommon for me to be speechless,
congrats you have completed a huge task.

[KimLove "The Beautiful ..]

The words you use in this are so fantastic, I am grateful I did not need a dictionary for this one. I did get the picture you where drawing very vividly only because I am there myself. Beautiful as always. xo

[Moflo]

This is worded fantastically. I love this piece, such amazing images and such a poignant read. Great work.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

When sonething we have been wanting falls apart it can be a hard pill to swallow... you certainly said it straight forward and full speed.

[Magdelena]

Whoa! Now this I am glad I came on for! it tore into me. The flow was exceptional. Right to the imagination. Very and I do mean, VERY, well done!!!

Mags xxx

[Ladysue]

very well executed, tight and good flow...great imagery...ah fairy-tales...ever notice how there is never a part two to them...this was a soulful write. excellently done...

[L]

liking the rhyme-scheme you employ here and you play with some strong imagery. Solid.

[Jeremy Baker]

"Fairytale end in a hurt and deceit" - such a moving line. There is so much implied in it as well; you captured much in a few words. Well done!