Dragon's Breath

A fiery breath caresses the neck

As sultry words enflame the ears

Comfort erases the tingling fears

Wrapping in the heat of desire

Encasing the body in fire

 

Lava flowing through engorged veins

Steam rising into the cool air

As passion envelopes your lair

Sweat beading on succulent skin

As sultry mirror visions begin

 

Sulfuric dragon’s breath of fire and ice

Slices the heart not once but twice

 

Without warning breath become like ice

Crystallizing volcanic flames

Icicles to the heart with perfect aim

Pulsing blood frozen with pain

Tears etched on cheeks like rain

 

Body shivers without desire’s light

Frozen vapor glitters in the room

Rose becomes an arctic bloom

As love dies in the frigid cold

Without ecstasy’s fevered hold

 

Sulfuric dragon’s breath of fire and ice

Slices the heart not once but twice

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Corrupthoughts]

Spectacular, the word choices are amazing in this. This piece should be used as an example of expanding ones vocab and imagery to younger poets. The metaphor behind the dragon is powerful and sensual, the repetition of "not once but twice" is perfectly added and not over done. The only thing I would suggest is finding another word for ice in stanza 3 to 4, it is used to often too close together for me. regardless, this piece astounded me.

This is amazing, I read the feeling of love, then the suddenness of a lie! but that is me and I don't normally comment on writings, even though I read them, unless they hit me personally.. Thank you

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

The balance between the two is sharp and very nicely done. It's harsh, biting and said with a great deal of bitter passion.

[Lily Mae]

I love it..you've got an excellent write here... I love the fire and ice which is life in general and who doesn't love the Dragon...? lol.. You never cease to amaze me with your great writes..xx