Eccentric Winds

this poem is very metaphorical.

Love’s sizzle has evaporated

The desert passion has disappeared

Leaving the heart blistered and seared

Flowers withered without a drink

Mind cracked, sanity on the brink

 

Life rearranging with a lost love

As winds of distortion blow dust

Veiling perception with metallic rust

An ice conversion petrifies the fire

Destroying its pulsing beat of desire

 

Delusions of the blissful past run deep

As Ardent memories creep into dreams

Causing agonizing teardrop streams

That lead to stagnate pools of scarlet red

With agony a gray moss covered bed

 

Then a thin sliver of light appears

Intoxicating winds begin to blow

Intrigued with flames of fire show

Drawn to silver disfigured moonlight

Fascination of words blind ones sight

 

Heart pulsing inside the once silent chest

Whirlwind of emotions storm the brain

As violet hearts poured down like rain

Cleansing the sorrowful onyx soul

Cementing the black miasmic hole

 

 Allowing the mind to find release

A symphonic wind sounds its unique beat

Creating an artistic flame of heat

Vivid imagery plays in the mind

Eccentric painting has been designed

Reviews

[Truman S. Booth]

The rhyme scheme was brilliant. It really added interest to the piece for me, as my lack of many years leaves me without much experience in the way of relationships. The way each stanza began with an unrhymed line stopped the flow for a moment, slowing the reader's mind, only to pick up speed in the rest of the stanza. I loved that feel… almost like a train struggling through a hilly pass, or one of those roller coasters with hydraulic stops every fifty feet. Great job.

[E.H. Monroe]

holy s****y undies batman..
a cleansing, done in the fire and leaving a concrete mass. The fire leaves and the heart beats. Getting rid of all the foul f*****g noise and retsarting the goddamn big block engine.

It really purrs when its tuned up.

Go get em girl

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Powerful stanzas! The imagery dressed this poem up to be so vivid in the readers mind! Excellent poem

[KimLove "The Beautiful ..]

I do believe this is the first poem I have read that has brought an old memory to mind very exposive realationship I once was in for 11 long years; I just love this stanza...
Delusions of the blissful past run deep
As Ardent memories creep into dreams
Causing agonizing teardrop streams
That lead to stagnate pools of scarlet red
With agony a gray moss covered bed
The metaphors you have going on in this are amazing how I saw any of it all but this a true love hate realationship. My interpitation anyways. xo

[Omar Fendri]

The rhyme scheme is carefully written here. This poem is really vivid with expression. The comparison is artistically created here ( Life rearranging with a lost love, As winds of distortion blow dust) and the image is ingeniously creative (I'd like to mention this one: An ice conversion petrifies the fire, Destroying its pulsing beat of desire)... emotions are raged ... excellent.

[SpokenWord]

My boss once told me sometimes we have to step back in order to get further ahead. To me the memories are taking are taking a step back. It is our chance to embrace that which has been born grown and since past, as passion often does.

"Fascination of words blind ones sight" with the word silver tossed around this verse made me think of a silver tongue and how it can blind people from the truth.

This poem also reminds me of new love found that raises the ashes into a new source of beauty.

[Jenny Nelson]

Lots to feel; lots to picture. Love the last line- very thought provoking. Well done!

[White Ink]

nicely flowing and great imagery.

[The Analog Kid]

I really liked the rhythm and rhyme to this one. Some great word choices too:)

[emmajoy]

Love again and again, foiling the best, creating the worst, leaving an aftermath of every emotion branded on heart and soul; yet from river to stream flows such beautiful pictures, memories of times, of night and day of right and wrong .. bliss on bliss ..