Cracked Heart

Cracked Heart

A Poem by Poetic Beauty
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Weariness begins to painfully show
As sorrowful moan escape cracked lips
While reality gradually slides and slips

Mind broken with memories of fear
As onyx nights become dreadful and real
Happiness no longer allowed to feel

A world distant with frozen lies
Beauty hides behind scratches and sores
Black depression seeps into minute pores

The sands of time no longer apply
Eternity cold with wound unhealed
Heart twisted fate's been sealed

Vaporous image moves down the hall
Disappearing into a darkened room
Crying for her lover, heart's filled with gloom

© 2011 Poetic Beauty


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This is chilling writing... 'onyx nights', 'frozen lies', 'eternity cold' and the words are gripped in bleak images of sores and cracked hardness... Sad but intensely powerful. You created a gith and well managed structure for the writing, with effective use of rhyme. This kind needs a lot of love!

Posted 13 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.




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Very nice write my dear.

Posted 13 Years Ago


0 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Excellent choice of words, pain can be felt reading this, very sad.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Well written poem, your imagerys were excellent. I could feel the sadness and lose!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

a dark and sad poetic that moves within the shadows of the heart .

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

An excellent dark poem.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Your words and picture show a deeply sad, mournful tale. A mind broken by fear, crying for her lover.........haunting.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh my, such dark, desperate lines .. a picture of black never ending sadness. Powerful but unyielding as if drowning in feelings you don't want to release, can't release.

As always created with skill and personal revelation into what makes you tick.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is chilling writing... 'onyx nights', 'frozen lies', 'eternity cold' and the words are gripped in bleak images of sores and cracked hardness... Sad but intensely powerful. You created a gith and well managed structure for the writing, with effective use of rhyme. This kind needs a lot of love!

Posted 13 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Well you nailed it for sure.. great write...:) x

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

A powerful poem. The emotion of loneliness and sadness are strong in your words. Each line with a purpose leading to a very sad ending. A outstanding poem. A lot of emotion and pain in the words.
Coyote

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 3 people found this review constructive.


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Poetic Beauty
Poetic Beauty

corn country, IL



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