Cracked Heart
A Poem by
Poetic Beauty
I challenge group write from the picture
Weariness begins to painfully show As sorrowful moan escape cracked lips While reality gradually slides and slips Mind broken with memories of fear As onyx nights become dreadful and real Happiness no longer allowed to feel A world distant with frozen lies Beauty hides behind scratches and sores Black depression seeps into minute pores The sands of time no longer apply Eternity cold with wound unhealed Heart twisted fate's been sealed Vaporous image moves down the hall Disappearing into a darkened room Crying for her lover, heart's filled with gloom
© 2011 Poetic Beauty
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This is chilling writing... 'onyx nights', 'frozen lies', 'eternity cold' and the words are gripped in bleak images of sores and cracked hardness... Sad but intensely powerful. You created a gith and well managed structure for the writing, with effective use of rhyme. This kind needs a lot of love!
Posted 13 Years Ago
3 of 3 people found this review constructive.
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All that is darkness and utter chaos, is written here! This holds such depth, powerful and befits the title extremely well! xx
Posted 13 Years Ago
All that is darkness and utter chaos, is written here! This holds such depth, powerful and befits the title extremely well! xx
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
I am a fan of the rhyme here
Posted 13 Years Ago
I am a fan of the rhyme here
0 of 1 people found this review constructive.
this is really great.
nice writing
Posted 13 Years Ago
this is really great.
nice writing
0 of 3 people found this review constructive.
Wow!! I'm in love with this piece!
nicely written..
i love this stanza..
"The sands of time no longer apply
Eternity cold with wound unhealed
Heart twisted fate's been sealed"
well done! :)
Posted 13 Years Ago
Wow!! I'm in love with this piece!
nicely written..
i love this stanza..
"The sands of time no longer apply
Eternity cold with wound unhealed
Heart twisted fate's been sealed"
well done! :)
3 of 3 people found this review constructive.
what a deep and interesting writing, I like it!
Posted 13 Years Ago
what a deep and interesting writing, I like it!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
This was a dense and chilling read, good stuff.
Posted 13 Years Ago
This was a dense and chilling read, good stuff.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
solid rhythm and rhyme..bold and strong images that match the picture well
Posted 13 Years Ago
solid rhythm and rhyme..bold and strong images that match the picture well
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
And challenge met! Wow the imagery is strong in this, broken heart, cracked lips waiting for a kiss, but it was destruction who quenched those chops…
Great Write!
RLG,
Tommy
Posted 13 Years Ago
And challenge met! Wow the imagery is strong in this, broken heart, cracked lips waiting for a kiss, but it was destruction who quenched those chops…
Great Write!
RLG,
Tommy
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
A haunting and tragic tale of someone who couldn't cross over. A really chilling ghost tale in a poem.
Posted 13 Years Ago
A haunting and tragic tale of someone who couldn't cross over. A really chilling ghost tale in a poem.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
I can feel everything slipping into the darkness in this fluid and melancholy poem.
Posted 13 Years Ago
I can feel everything slipping into the darkness in this fluid and melancholy poem.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Poetic Beauty corn country, IL
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First off I'm on here to post my writing to have an outlet for my emotions. You will find a variety of poems. If you like take a moment and stroll through this poets mind.
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