Raw Thirst

 

Cosmic rubble of emotions

Envelope a confused mind

Chaos and confusion combine

 

Intoxicated by love

Heart stammers with aching pain

Crimson tears falling like rain

 

But hope illuminates life

Entangling lifting the soul

Recharging a feeling once stole

 

Stabling the tipped balance

Quenching a raw thirst

Letting joy once again burst

Reviews

[Nothing Personal]

It's like a lot of concepts or ideas..often interconnected by dots that are being joined together with a graphite pencil and given a form..That;s the feel of the poem..The language is excellent and the message- it conveys the convoluted journey that is undertaken before finding/discovering/ realizing joy..

[Jūdan FyreHeart]

A great use of textures and images to fully convey your dark feelings and draw the reader in. A nice little happy note to finish it on.

[Fallacy Pharmacy]

Blind hope is a fool's mother's...And any human must be foolish indeed not to hold onto it. An amazing write!

[Amanda Dawn Sanderson-G..]

'Cosmic rubble of emotions
Envelope a confused mind
Chaos and confusion combine'

When a new wave of emotions strike the heart, it's a great race of chaos and confusion that makes ones mind race...

I really enjoyed reading this poem... and I really liked how you only rhymed the last words in the last two sentences in each stanza. Great write.

[Desert Dreamer]

Life is lived best when all the emotions are experienced...

[Linear]

Love is truely a rollercoaster of emotions, it will drain us, confuse us then without warning lift us clear off our feet, It mat slay us trample hearts beneath heels, yet we get up and risk all simply for it's joy. thoughtful poem

[Robin]

from the chaos , hope and a shining light ~ joy !

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

But hope illuminates life
Entangling lifting the soul
Recharging a feeling once stole

Nothing makes you feel more alive or young then passion raging through the veins...

Stabling the tipped balance
Quenching a raw thirst
Letting joy once again burst

and there is no greater rush then releasing that passion.

[OT]

very nice!! the first stanza is very powerful and then sets the scene for the rest of the poem!! I like the rhyme scheme too!! nice!

[Ladysue]

I absolutely love the beginning stanza and the rest follows to a wonderfully positive ending...You penned this well...