Comfort of a Tomb

Inky black hair blows upon

A dreary charcoal night

As lightening bugs take flight

 

The wind wisps through the trees

She kneels beside the grave

His touch forever she will crave

 

A coffin lay quiet

In the mournful cold dark

A heart with a scarring mark

 

Bleeding in tearful pain

Now shrewd she will remain

Love a vacant domain

 

Skeptical thoughts flood her mind

No peace will come this time

Giving her soul, her crime

 

Ambrosial nights long gone

Comfort lost in this tomb

Shadows surround with gloom

Reviews

[The Analog Kid]

Kind of a nebulous plot here to this. Leave it to the reader..kudos. The only line I struggled with was: "A coffin lays quiet." First, I think it must be "quietly." Also, check on the correct usage of "lay." I am not sure, but that one always troubles me. I always have to look it up:)

[Arabdha]

i already added this one to my favorites..!!

[Tina Kline]

A lot of pain and regret in this dark poem. The imagery in it is nicely dark and a bit chilling, creates fantastic atmosphere. There's a mystery here of dark deeds, a lost lover and emotional pain. Perhaps regret too. This is excellent!

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

This was sad and dark, the imagery and flow was excellent, great poem!

[Ruth]

Leaves the reader feeling there is more not being told, unresolved in a way - great piece love, thoguht provoking :)
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[Nothing Personal]

A dark poem..One that is filled with eternal regret and disappointment. What I like about this piece is the way you have built an atmosphere..There's that one-two lines packed in the poem here and there talking about how it is and actually they speak of the loss which could be both inside the mind or outside in the world. The sense of loss extends from a human life to anything else which has to buried to be never uncovered and found.. Overall, a very mood arousing poem..I enjoyed it.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

A coffin lay s quiet
In the mournful cold dark
A heart with a scaring mark

to me this speaks of a person so stricken with grief their emotions are numb... a very nice flow to a very chilling and ominous poem.

[Ladysue]

This is sad, but you penned this with great feeling and skill. This was tight with a good flow. You have some good phrasing in here...A good piece of writing...

[Jenny Nelson]

"Giving her soul, her crime" Love shouldn't be so complicated or painful, but it often is, especially when one loves the wrong person. Great description, flow and feel to this. Very sad. Very resigned. Very final. Well done!

[Vitcky Walker]

Mystical, and sorrowful poem...but it has the feels in it...
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