Fragile Glass

Submerged within the soul is a deep sigh

Refreshing breath released into the heart

Tension gone leaving an emotional high

 

Chains once imprisoning the heart are broken

Thrown upon the ground signaling freedom

The beast of sorrow’s voice no longer spoken

 

Enveloping tingles travel down the spine

Sliding through the body creating a warmth

Allowing tranquility and peace to combine

 

Rapidly deep tension begins to subside

Leaving the mind blissful with a deep silence

Heartache exiled without a place to reside

 

Succulent harmony encases the soul

Cascading with the rush of a waterfall

Painful restraints broken are a heart’s parole

Mercurial emotions are buried at last

Immersed in an impenetrable chasm

Demolishing the past like fragile glass

Reviews

[Esoteric Strand]

The message of emancipation and tone has a nice, positive feel throughout. Also, points for the tight structure, it’s just some of the lines are…odd.

‘The beast of sorrow’s voice no longer spoken.’
(Sorrow’s voice is a beast?)

‘Allowing tranquility and peace to combine.’
(Reads redundant, like saying, rage and anger combine, or sadness and grief combine)

‘Rapidly deep tension begins to subside’
(I thought the tension was gone, according to the first stanza)

‘Succulent harmony encases the soul’
( I don’t follow this description)


I feel the metaphoric take-away of these lines is too vague. They leave the reader puzzled, which isn’t always a bad thing, it’s just that this is a straight forward poem.

[Ice QueenJen]

This was a great poem Poetic!

[Poetic Beauty]

I think we all have these moments in life where we say the hell with self imprisonment and smash those chains with sledge hammer of the gods.

[Poetic Beauty]

I think we all have these moments in life where we say the hell with self imprisonment and smash those chains with sledge hammer of the gods.

[Poetic Beauty]

I think we all have these moments in life where we say the hell with self imprisonment and smash those chains with sledge hammer of the gods.

[Poetic Beauty]

I think we all have these moments in life where we say the hell with self imprisonment and smash those chains with sledge hammer of the gods.

[Poetic Beauty]

I think we all have these moments in life where we say the hell with self imprisonment and smash those chains with sledge hammer of the gods.

[HorrorMaster]

Amazing poem

[Poetic Beauty]

I think we all have these moments in life where we say the hell with self imprisonment and smash those chains with sledge hammer of the gods.

[Poetic Beauty]

I think we all have these moments in life where we say the hell with self imprisonment and smash those chains with sledge hammer of the gods.

[Sweets]

Wonderful use of imagery!
I loved the flow.
"Rapidly deep tension begins to subside
Leaving the mind blissful with a deep silence
Heartache exiled without a place to reside "
Great use of vocabulary as well!
Nicely done!

[Tina Kline]

Very impressive write, I love your style on this one. One does get a sense of the calming down in this piece after suffering emotional turmoil. Described nicely.

[InkSlinger]

~ cast off the chains.. that I might spread my wings and soar..

[Mauricio Montoya]

Looking within to find the key to set ones self free, breaking the chain that confines the soul, wow! An emotional rollercoaster ride of energies in a positive form.
Excellent write.

[Twilight]

Nice writing - quite passionate! Also, this piece has a good poetic structure and rhyme scheme. For a relatively short piece of writing, this is quite powerful! Thankyou, Kristina!

[Crowley]

Wow....getting past the "past" is such a huge thing. Realizing that it is just that, something that has already happened. There is no fixing it, or remedying the situation. the more we look back the less of our now and our future we can enjoy. aint no going back....period. Great write.

[E.H. Monroe]

Ugh. Another relationship breaker. This is one of those that you manage to read after the final fight with an other and just happens to show up on your doorstep at the wrong time.
But the last three stanzas see hope. The harmony that encases the soul and washes away the crap. SOmething that sweeps the past away, like a saving grace.

Its a tight knit back and forth

Good read