A Heart's Liberation

The first poem Bette and I have collaborated on. Each one did a stanza.

With spunk in my purposeful step
I glide down an unknown hallway
Feeling unattached to the past
Inner peace consuming life at last

It seems years since I’ve seen his face
Tasted his smile, inhaled his scent
Back is straight, with a strained plastic grin
Is time for a truce, all games will end

It is time to slam that door shut

Close it with an impenetrable seal  
That won’t be reopened or broken
A love there but never to be spoken

Sowing the oats double at the seams
Not even allowed to roam in my dreams
Covered in cobwebs that crack in my mind
Once my prison, he’s forced there to hide

A liberation of the soul and mind
In the unpredictable twist of fate
You have given me a sweet release in life
No more heart embedded with a knife  

These chains are off, they’ve hit the floor
No more feelings binding me to your love
Just you behind it, on the other side
This time you’ll miss me, your turn to cry.


Praying you feel how I did for so long
Hoping you are encompassed with loss
Wondering if the love is still there
Wishing that dreams we will still share

She sees you standing, with your pants down
Sultry and growling, My name on your lips
Hot flesh, calloused hands, stroking, surrender
Its what you do when you remember

No more playing your desirous games
 You feeling frisky? call your fiancé
For these boundaries are set in stone  
You’re now attached and no longer alone

Bring it to the table, have a cup of truth
Its your game we are playing here
I already know the rules, you soon will see
That she can’t, she won’t, she'll never be me  
 
Deep within slumber my face will reappear
You’ll wish my heart and body you could touch
And during a moment of heated passion
My name you’ll scream, I’d like to see her reaction

To see her eyes as her world crashes down
The curl of her lip, the angry smack to your face

 It will be deserved, don’t utter a sound
Don’t look for me, my hearts no longer bound.  

Love will forever encase this tender heart
Yet I can’t give it completely to you
You changed the way the relationship went
Gone is the bond and soulful sentiment

Reviews

[Poeticadia]

A strong and expressive poem... the "liberation of the soul and mind" fighting back! I love the image these lines convey...

And during a moment of heated passion
My name you’ll scream, I’d like to see her reaction

Really enjoyed reading this. A great story and poem in one.

[tynamite]

I'm sure people can relate to this. You really know how to convey emotions into words. I've favourited it. The poem is so good, you could use the first 2 paragraphs itself as a poem.

[The Analog Kid]

You two really drove a point home. You volley back an forth and then spike it home. My favorite stanza is:

"It is time to slam that door shut
Close it with an impenetrable seal
That won’t be reopened or broken
A love there but never to be spoken"




Damn good and I have been there too...

[SpokenWord]

I can honestly say that I can relate to this poem on all levels right now, how fitting for me to read it now. Before I comment more I have to share this thought.

"She sees you standing, with your pants down
Sultry and growling, My name on your lips
Hot flesh, calloused hands, stroking, surrender
Its what you do when you remember"

This part made me laugh to myself because I know this has happened in the past to some men. It is true for those who can't bite their tongues hard enough an X lover's name can fall not so innocently from their lips.

I think you have an understanding of men and what motivates us, what we miss
and desire. I think over all this is a slam poem a strong message to one person who obviously chose the wrong woman.

[DalainaRenee]

Well written. I love the photo youve chosen too.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I don't know who wrote which verses but both voice are full of strength, liberation and confidence... nice tag team by you two.

[Frantzuu]

This is a very deep poem, and you did a great job getting that emotional response out of the reader. Great job!

[Coyote Poetry]

No weakness in this poem. I read it a second time. Your statement were strong and to the point.
"She sees you standing, with your pants down
Sultry and growling, My name on your lips
Hot flesh, calloused hands, stroking, surrender
Its what you do when you remember "
The poem told a powerful story with honest words and feelings. The poem is outstanding. I like how you ended the poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Ladysue]

A good collaboration...First stanza reeled me in and the rest followed strongly...A great stuff within this piece...

[Crowley]

Ahhhhhhhh....even though I got it wrong....the new font and color make me happy.

[E.H. Monroe]

You had me at spunk.

But seriously...
This is reminiscent of a 3 parter I'm putting up next called Make Pattern Bullshit. The s**t guys will shovel females and then have the inability to turn off the passion, or will always think about/go back to what they know.
Locking up the heart and not releasing it again to anyonw is a good way to stay in one piece, but a horrible lock that no one else gets to open.

Its a mixture of sex and hopelessness. Had to strain my good eye to read it, but it was worth the headache.

I would love to see this in story form where the woman wins.

For once yeah?