Speak Your Mind

written for a contest.

When violence is seen in the streets
Stand up against the crime protect the meek
Don't be a coward worthless and weak

If a woman is brutally being beat
Take a stand rise against the abuse
Don't pretend no to see, be of use

A man lays shivering on the concrete
Rise up offer a warm blanket and food
Don't make mocking comments that are rude

If a child's bullied because of their race
Step in defend the innocent one
Pretend it is your own daughter or son

Take a stand against everyday crime
Rise up and give a lending helping hand
Step in for we have freedoms in this land.

Reviews

[Undying Glory]

aw man this was just great work! i just love the whole deep message and theme of this write! i'm real glad you wrote this. is more love and compassion not what the world needs?

"Take a stand against everyday crime
Rise up and give a lending helping hand
Step in for we have freedoms in this land."
awesome! personally though i don't feel that they're crimes.
Why? because they are FAR more than crimes.
They are diseases of our very society that have become so widespread that they have become socially acceptable, and it's those who speak out who appear to be the weird ones.
stop this epidemic!
awesome write!

[Marie Harrison]

Yes, this is good. There is so much violence and crime right now, this is a poem that fits in with society's current trends. If we want to live in a safe and civil place we all have to chip in and do our part to make sure to make our society safe and comfortable to remain in.

[*skittlez*]

so true but maybe you would like to add puncuation marks at the end to make it look so better and not so choppy and a few spelling errors to lol

[underwriter]

so true, no enough people stand up for those who need help! i think there are a few spelling mistakes though, "Don't pretend no to see, be of use" is that supposed to be not? also "Step in for we have freedoms in this land." is it supposed to be freedom? hope it helps! :)
another good write! well done!

[Inkcognito]

Wonderful reminder for us all to take a stand against what is wrong...
"Don't be a coward worthless and weak"...Strong write with a great message.
Super job, Kristina!

[HopelesslyDevoted]

this is something that i think every one needs to be reminded of everyday! we are all different and we have different paths in life, but that doesn't mean we shouldn't help the other when they fall on their way down the path.
there are so many people that forget that in the end we are all humans, we are all connected in one way or another. the only way we will ever have peace in this world is we come together and love eachother instead of fighting and help instead of kicking dirt in their faces or thinking how much better we are then them. we are all equal and we should all treat one another with equal respect, love, and friendship. this poem showed that perfect! wonderfully written! love it! i'm giving this 100 on the rating! awesome job!

[Esoteric Strand]

I’m curious, what were the rules of the challenge? Either way, this piece is a pleasure to read because of the rhyme scheme and the polished format. Well done there.

My only issue was the rather obvious message, and again, this could have been part of the original challenge, so I can’t really critique that.

Regards,

E

[Gone]

I could not agree more! "Evil thrives when good people do nothing!!" Cant remeber who said that but it is so true. nicely structured too.

[Coyote Poetry]

Your words are true. They are simple rules all people should go by. Too many blind people to the misery around them. I like this positive and strong poem. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Chelsea]

This is so beautiful! I really hate when thing happen and nobody gives a damn. It almost reminds me of a poem I wrote "Trampled by the World". Like all of this happens, and people, they just walk by as if I horrific sight wasn't to be seen. Nobody even tries to help them out.
You speak words of truth. Beautiful poem! Added to my favourites and read requests sent out to my friends :)

[Bette]

love this, strong words! Well done!