Fateful Silence

only 14 more days till the silence is broken.

Impenetrable silence stretches through the days
Ticking hands on the fateful clock, sounding through the hours
Ominous quiet over casting the smile's bright rays
Shadowing clouds causing misery to down pour showers.

Threatening emotions rage within the confused mind
Storming sadness rumbles in the disparaging distance
Thundering agony surfacing and does binds
Intelligence losing control and resistance

Barricades smashing, crumbling into gritty sand
Pulsing waves overtaking tranquility and calm
Deafening silence still looming across the bleak land
Shattered heart weeping , bleeding in a cold palm

Shouting for an answer, pleading, begging for sound
Name protruding from vulnerable needful lips
Why is the heart eternally, to him, chained and bound
Memories repeat playing like slow motion movie clips.

Reviews

[StacyPerry]

Thank you for sharing this piece. On the line "Intelligence LOOSING control and resistance"...did you mean LOSING or were you speaking about LOOSENING?? I enjoyed the write, I didn't want to read the line wrong though [please do not take it as a criticism....just curious to which was you mean things and it looks a good read whichever you mean].

[Ice QueenJen]

Great writing, sorry it's taken so long to read.

[Poetic Beauty]

No worries. I'm not writing much these days, therefore not on here much

[Ladysue]

wow, that last verse was outstanding... great passion and intensity to this piece...deep and powerful...great piece of writing...glad I found this one...

[Nothing Personal]

Oh ITS BRILLIANT Kristina. An amazing work here. I could feel the pulse of silence slowly seeping in...It has a great feel to it..And the image you create so wonderful, so poetic. i cant pick specific lines but the first stanza and the third stanza was sooo good. i loved the barricades smashing effect you created. The desire, the deep yearning in this poem to overcome silence is the soul of this one..love your piece

[Mauricio Montoya]

Great choice of words, the blend helps bring out the emotion in this piece.
Excellent write

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Silence is not always golden when it comes to loved ones...

Barricades smashing, crumbling into gritty sand
Pulsing waves overtaking tranquility and calm
Deafening silence still looming across the bleak land
Shattered heart weeping , bleeding in a cold palm

that's my favorite part... very emotionally charged writing.

[The Warrior Poet]

I like the way this is written - especially the image "Shattered heart weeping , bleeding in a cold palm"

[Sean M. Addams]

very deep and well written ... I thought you did great on this one emotions ran well through this ... excellent job on this one !!

[Bette]

good job k, it wont be long girly hold your head up.

[Crowley]

Despair and frustration. so often bedfellows and so is the case for this poem. Not sure 14 days til what , but I am not so sure I would be looking forward to it if this was the wya it made me feel. This was a really deep crevice sweet, crazy emotional and in your face. Great peice of writing.

[Dream Weaver]

Teetering on an emotional void.
Questions that have no answers.
A unavoidable heartrending piece.