Desolate Earth

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Black damaging smoke swirls in the red sky
Thick and bellowing overtaking the air
Sucking out the oxygen, the earth does cry
Eyes can only look upon with glassy stares

Engulfing orange flames spring up from the ground
Chard sand blazing, desolate beyond repair
Crackling, with sorrowful mourning sounds
As destruction blazes with a consuming flair

Rock formations left to the fiery pits of hell
Chard beyond recognition, crumbling down
Sulfuric odor swirls around, a gagging smell
Devastation left, vanishes in flames, a town

War destroys all that its greedy fingers touch
Leaving burned, crumpled ruins in its path
is different opinions worth hating this much?
Desolating the earth because of human wrath

Reviews

[Crowley]

Hell fire and brimstone...this is a dark and desolate picture you painted, but I guess that was the point. Very vivid images painted here, it has me sweating after reading it. As always nice work, I still have to write mine for the group, it gets harder with all the talent in the group these days.

[The Perfectionist]

I'm pretty sure I've used that picture for something...

I got this one to flow by reading it at a fast tempo, which is actually very fitting all things considered, but I'm not sure if it's what you meant to do. You're cramming a lot of syllables into each line using big words that you don't always need. It's a simple story, you could have done this with simpler language. This works, but at the same time it feels like an unnecessary extravagance, like buying a mink coat for your dog.

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Another great write with very good vivid picture of the whole poem! very talented!!

[Linear]

War what is it good for? the survival of the fit ones, the victory to those who use the most power or indeed have the most! NO NO NO i wont live in a world without hope......Great poem

[SpokenWord]

I believe human's will kill this planet one way or the other. We fight each other with the deadliest intent. The WMD have the power to not only remove us from this earth but to damage the earth for all living things. This is a great eye opening write for all of us and especially those who love war.

[David W Moore III]

quite a picture you paint. do we need war? maybe sometimes. Do we get (as a public) the true information that would let us make an informed decision on it? rarely ever. Truly sad. Nice work.

[Sunflower/Sara Kendrick]

Great write using the comparison to the destruction of fire to hate and to wars hurt..I am glad that I chose this one to read today..Sunflower

[The Water Queen]

Very vivid pictures and very vivd words. This is a stunning write and can give the reader many emotions. great job.

[HorrorMaster]

very good poem

[Robin]

strong brush strokes in this piece ...

one would think, if asked opinion of man to man , religion to religion, a consenus would be to fight poverty, famine and disease ... yet ...

[Sean M. Addams]

very nice ... love the imagery in this .. very dark and intense piece...overall i thought you did great on this ...cool pic too!!!