Bleeding Heart

A Collaborative poem done with Sean M. Adams. the horror go to guy.

Pulsing rapidly deep within the protective chest

Fiery burning, the pain consumes and does crest

Needing reprieve from the piercing sorrowful loss

Convulsing from the stabbing need, life becomes cross

Bloody teardrops drip with growing arresting pain

Achingly beating to the rhythm of the mournful rain

Dripping splattering bloody drops of crimson tears

Bleeding profusely over achingly bitter years.

 

  Puddles of red sorrow spread throughout my dried up soul of land

Feeling like a wounded puppet putting a needle through each hand

Blood begins to boil my burning body feels like a flame

Scarred covered skin a reminder of my darkened years of shame

 

Inside is like a fiery prison I’m clawing through the sin

Peeling off each demon layer of my blood soaked skin

Screaming out to God as I rip myself apart

Breaking through the throbbing chest I free my bleeding heart!

Reviews

[G. Marie"floating on an..]

wow i am just speechless at the images this poems conjours up in my mind. I had written a poem quite some time ago called bleeding hearts and still cant seem to perfect what I wanted to portray. but here you did it you described the feelings to the tee. great write a little dark but thats not a bad thing it adds to the profound feel of the poem fantastic job!!!!

[Mauricio Montoya]

I like the choice of word you used to put this together it brings the piece to life.
Great job well done

[Bette]

absolutely wonderful perfect in every way well done!!

[HorrorMaster]

You guys did a good job on this poem.

[Jenny Nelson]

I agree, you two should continue to work together. You mix quite well and come out with some unique and strong pieces.

[StacyPerry]

Very 'to the point' by showing so much imagery. Good write.

[Coyote Poetry]

Sometime we wish it was so easy to pull out out heart and forget. A very powerful poem. The description and detail was amazing. You wrote a outstanding poem. Straight to the point and no wasted words.
Coyote

[Crusaderscross]

Really good piece of collaboration. Sounds like someone in love...:)...really good imagery in this poem and the words are chosen well to grip the reader

Good job

[Ladysue]

This has a really good flow...great collab...it is lyrical and the imagery was excellent...nicely done...

[kewlbluetiger]

Wow. Ya brought new meaning to havin' a broken heart. Let me get a mop for all of the blood! Really nice descriptive work.