Desert Rose

Desert Rose

A Poem by Poetic Beauty

Estranged in a distant land;
Filled with sunburns and sand,
Pulsing on the parched ground;
Thumping with its unique sound.

Delicately laid at your feet;
Quietly strumming it's beat,
Pulsing a rhythm all its own;
Potently a passion is shown.

Pleading to be caressed, with need;
An organ, sobbing it bleeds,
Hungry for your love it pleads;
Maroon heart, the desert rose,
Waiting with patience at your toes.
 

© 2010 Poetic Beauty


Author's Note

Poetic Beauty
the last stanza is a little different. Tell me if you think it affects the flow.

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The first stanza blew me away with the use of rhyming words that get me drawn totally. I can tell your writing skills have improved a lot. I compared this with one of your old poems and I can see how your writing skills have grown beautifully. Keep writing because you are such a great writer

Posted 14 Years Ago


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Well if I had known that roses felt this way I would care for each and everyone of them. Very sweet poem.

Posted 13 Years Ago


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Nope the stanza works nicely here, capping off a very passionate feel... Well done!

Posted 13 Years Ago


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The last stanza works..your words are imbued with passion here.It is a passion which is patient too...:)Also i like the length of the poem.

Posted 14 Years Ago


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Oh i love this. it's beautiful, love the imagery. :)

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really liked this piece, i think the last stanza capped it off nicely.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great start which comes together beautify, all in all, nice work.

Posted 14 Years Ago


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I love the last stanza...makes the whole thing very organic. I love the mixture of great rhyme and visualization to bring about the essence of modern living in the desert. This had a desperate feel to the last half of the poem...something is waiting and wanting someone to come, but I have the feeling they never did. Really nice job, I loved it.

Posted 14 Years Ago


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This whole poem was stunning. visibly and mentally stunning the last stanza:
Pleading to be caressed, with need;
An organ, sobbing it bleeds,
Hungry for your love it pleads;
Maroon heart, the desert rose,
Waiting with patience at your toes
Was my favorite and sealed this poem with a perfectly executed chill. The ryhme was on and so was the flow. Great job!

Posted 14 Years Ago


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Amazing poem. I love it

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I adore this piece - it is just divine.

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Poetic Beauty
Poetic Beauty

corn country, IL



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