A very beautiful poem with a dream-like quality to it. I also liked the use of alliteration you use within the stanzas. I was a little confused with sunglasses and night but still a really nice phrase when you think about it. I like the way you create the scenes so nicely. Nice job.
A very beautiful poem with a dream-like quality to it. I also liked the use of alliteration you use within the stanzas. I was a little confused with sunglasses and night but still a really nice phrase when you think about it. I like the way you create the scenes so nicely. Nice job.
You've very clearly created a place and time with some wonderful words, particularly in the second and third stanzas .. and the way you've introduced your 'quiet figure' makes it come alive even more .. 'Memories unforgotten, still in their place. '
I like the precision of the scene you describe here, and the well-composed, classically-inspired lines. I can see it all clearly, and it is the beginning of a great story.
just what dreams are made up of ! it's amazing how many of us transcend to the beach (i presume that) to meet our love in our dreams . the opening and closing stanzas were brilliant ! thanks for sharing
This was different and a surprising read, just that the words were interesting! I liked this, and the feeling it left. I like, again, the ending to this one. I think you're good at tying up the endings together to make a poem just right. "sunlight creeps upon a sleeping face." Thanks! :D
First off I'm on here to post my writing to have an outlet for my emotions. You will find a variety of poems. If you like take a moment and stroll through this poets mind.
Secondly be kind to each .. more..