Silvery Web of Deceit

Tiny onyx spiders spin their webs,
Deceit filled little strings that shine;
Encasing, surrounding all that is mine.

Silvery intricate patterns are spun;
Delicately entwining destructive lies,
Catching luring, petite fluttering flies.

Complicated twists unravel the truth;
Tighter, silvery strings are woven together,
Ensnaring honesty, hurt now weathered.

Spinning until destructive plans show;
Emotions crawling with astounding shock,
Intricate webs distort, a trust does lock.




 

Reviews

[emmajoy]

What a great title .. you certainly spun your own tale in this finely created poem ..

'Complicated twists unravel the truth;
Tighter, silvery strings are woven together,
Ensnaring honesty, hurt now weathered.'

That's so near the mark yet you've turned the emotion behind it into quite lovely phrases. I love to look at spiders' webs - can sit looking for ages (and yes, I do have a life!), and each time I see how intricately they turn out i realise just how incredible those little creatures are .. imagine if men could spin webs!

That phrase 'web of lies' becomes something different with your very clever, yet lovely poem.

[Frifthor (D^2)]

I like the way you put your spin on a common saying or idea. While we all know of "Webs of lies", your poem puts it into both a physical and mental state. Excellent piece.

[Manda]

A very nice write. The way you compared a spider and emotions was great! Nicely done!

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Excellent imagery-and
you kept the mood and theme
going through every verse-
i really love this...Magnificent!!!

james:-)

[Katie Louise Hughes]

This had a great theme, and left me feeling somewhat scorned by that horrible spider spinning all those lies, lol! Thanks for the read, keep up the writing! :D I did enjoy how you took the idea of a spider spinning lies into a very well written poem, and added your own outlook and creativity into it! My favorite lines were- "Silvery intricate patterns are spun;
Delicately entwining destructive lies,
Catching luring, petite fluttering flies."
(Let's hope those helpless flies aren't any of us soon! lol)

[Ruth]

Excellent wording here hon!
Each line seeps into the next effortlessly, thats great talent :)
I love this poem, the trust deceived within a web to last!
Awesome
xx

[Coyote Poetry]

The words are beautiful. I read the poem a few times. You create a poem that is a pleasure to read. I like the meaning inside the words. The truth is hard to unravel from liars. Plans of fools will leave us in turmoil. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Ice QueenJen]

A most interesting poem and the use of spiders and their webs. great work poetic!

[Jenny Nelson]

"Intricate webs distort, a trust does lock."

Wraps the piece up quite well. Well done!

[Ladysue]

Oh I liked this...from the title to those ending words. This has many layers. nicely done...

[Cheryl J. Turner]

Ooooh I like it, It's different and full of thought.