Silvery Web of Deceit

Tiny onyx spiders spin their webs,
Deceit filled little strings that shine;
Encasing, surrounding all that is mine.

Silvery intricate patterns are spun;
Delicately entwining destructive lies,
Catching luring, petite fluttering flies.

Complicated twists unravel the truth;
Tighter, silvery strings are woven together,
Ensnaring honesty, hurt now weathered.

Spinning until destructive plans show;
Emotions crawling with astounding shock,
Intricate webs distort, a trust does lock.




 

Reviews

[emmajoy]

What a great title .. you certainly spun your own tale in this finely created poem ..

'Complicated twists unravel the truth;
Tighter, silvery strings are woven together,
Ensnaring honesty, hurt now weathered.'

That's so near the mark yet you've turned the emotion behind it into quite lovely phrases. I love to look at spiders' webs - can sit looking for ages (and yes, I do have a life!), and each time I see how intricately they turn out i realise just how incredible those little creatures are .. imagine if men could spin webs!

That phrase 'web of lies' becomes something different with your very clever, yet lovely poem.

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I thought it was well put together with a good theme. Lies can be as destructive as any spider deceiving its prey. The very last line seemed a little forced to me. ( a trust does lock?) Other then that, a fine poem.

[SpokenWord]

This was a perfect write I am not sure I can add more here as far as a review. Your detail shows the calculated actions of the spider to execute its destructive plan on unsuspected victims. Perfect indeed.

[kewlbluetiger]

Spidey sensed illiteration here. Your word choice is so excellent to use the "t" sound over and over to give it a tingly feel. Perfectly done in the third stanza. Great work.

[The Analog Kid]

This is a well-constructed poem. Spinning a web is just like spinning a lie in a web of deceit!

[Antonio Valentino]

Lies are the worse aren't they?

Great poem here about one of the weaknesses about humanity.

Well done.
Antonio

[Crowley]

This had a strange and surreal feel to it. Onyx spiders is a great visual. Great depiction of the depths that little fibs can reach. Nice job.

[Taylor H.]

I hate spiders but I loved this poem :)

[Bette]

well done great play on words...oh the webs we weave

[Mauricio Montoya]

A different way to spin what a tangled web we weave.
Excellent write.